The Massassi chanted their delight at the prospective sport as the Zabrak entered their reflexively formed circle. Standing in the center stood a smaller human female, her eyes glowing with the indomitable hatred that coursed through her. The orbs flickered over the intruder’s face as he approached and Kul could see the hunger behind them. His master was letting herself sink deeper into the Force each passing day, but it was beginning to affect her in other ways as well. The veil of dark energy clouded her inhibitions just enough for passing moments of confusion where she would forget even her own apprentice was an ally. It was times like these that Kul normally avoided her lest he be the recipient of her ire, but this time he had decided to follow her to wherever it was she secluded herself. He should have known it would be a place such as this.
He approached cautiously, slowly laying back the hood of his armored cloak. Placing two hands before him submissively, he called out to his master.
“Master Rhode? It is I, your apprentice, Kul. I’ve come to take you back to the Anchorage.”
A grim look crossed her smooth face, yet her eyes seemed to convalesce. “Apprentice. What have I told you about disturbing my training?”
Kul frowned. Surely his concern for his master was reason enough to inquire into her well-being. Training kicked in and he knelt before her, throwing a gauntlet to his chest plate. “Of course, Master, you told me to leave you to it, as distractions would impede your progress. But…”
Tendrils of electricity flickered into being as the energy around her grew with her anger. “Then why do you not listen!” The Zabrak’s head exploded with pain as he was launched sideways. He thought at first that he’d been sideblinded by one of the Massassi, but as his master placed a foot down realized he’d been struck by her boot. Surprise intermingled with fury arose in him, and he stood briskly ignoring the throbbing that caused in his head.
“Master, the Force is beginning to blind you. You must realize this. It is a dangerous path you walk. I understand the desire for power, I do, we all seek it. But is excess really the way if it destroys you in the process?” He purposely stayed back, lest he fall victim to another outburst. He wiggled his jaw bone. She certainly had feet of steel.
“Do not speak at me like a Jedi, Apprentice. The Force does not blind me, it shall free me. You would do well to remember your training.” He eyes flickered and Kul felt a pulsing emit from her presence. “Now leave me. Or I will remind you who is the master here.”
Kul felt torn as multiple emotions roiled inside him, loyalty to his master mixed with rage at her stubborn pride. He knew he could not just leave her here. It might already be too late, but he had to try. He knew his own strength was iron to her steel, but he had to get through. He looked her in the eyes, the very eyes who had (so long ago, he thought sullenly) looked up at him and said she would take him as her apprentice when no one else would.
“I’m afraid I cannot obey that command, Master.”
She tsked as her saberstaff appeared in her hands. She twirled it gently.
“So be it.”
Launching herself across the circle she attempted to cut him down as quickly as possible. Just before she landed, however, Kul cloaked himself. Stepping to the side, he dropped as Taranae swung her blade in a horizontal strike trying to catch him if he was still in range. Rolling on the ground he swung a leg, caught her heel and pulled it forward, unbalancing her. He bounced up and caught her with a cross hook, driving her back in a stumble. He made to press his advantage, but was unaware of the stance she’d caught herself in. Not quite settling one of her knees on the ground, Tara dropped her saber just long enough to catch the brunt of Kul’s stampede. Using his momentum she propelled him over her shoulder. He soared briefly before landing behind her with a crack! as his armour met stone. He stood slower this time and his cloak shimmered then broke. He took a few deep breaths as a bit of Force-fatigue swept over him.
He rolled his shoulders. “Alright. New plan.”
Two very minor Syntax issues in one spot: He[r] eyes flickered and Kul felt a pulsing emit from her presence. “Now leave me[, o]r I will remind you who is the master here.”
I'm also going to have to ding you on Realism for Force Cloak. The first issue is the activation time. While a time isn't specified in the Force Powers guide for +2, we can assume it's somewhere between +1's "over the course of about half a minute" and +3's "in the space of a few seconds." Kul'tak's bringing his Cloak up faster than he should really be able to.
The bigger issue with Cloak is that he keeps it up for that entire fight scene. He still needs a pretty significant degree of focus, and although his Ghosting I feat lets him move while Cloaked, it still specifies that he has to be moving "slowly and deliberately" and that he uncloaks during attacks or fast movements.
The way you have Kul'tak cloak to avoid the initial strike is ok (if too fast, see above), but he really should drop it permanently when he does that rolling kick from the ground.