Talis concentrated on the Force, fully allowing the energy to spread throughout his body. His anger channeled through him augmenting his abilities. He could feel his muscles growing stronger, more resilient.
Aiden felt the shift in the Force around his opponent. Not knowing what was coming, he readied himself for the Acolyte’s attack. The Knight began to focus the Force into his left hand. The energy rippled and pulsed in his arm, just waiting to be released.
Talis could clearly see Aiden through the force, his body outlined, and he smirked. The Acolyte charged forward with increased speed, and used his improved strength the thrust his lightsaber towards the Knights chest.
Ready for his opponent, Aiden thrust his arm to the ground, impacting his pent up energy into a shockwave. The ground rippled away from Aiden, the central point of the collision. Talis, nearly tripping over the shockwave of energy, leapt into the air, jumping higher than was possible before.
As he flipped in the air, he landed on a broken statue. Leaping from statue to statue, Talis came to a halt as he landed on the mezzanine above them, and stared down at the Taldryan.
Knowing his time was limited, Talis dove from the edge of the balcony-like walkway,, slashing his blade at Aiden’s head as he fell. Aiden parried the lightsaber again, his skill as a duelist proving to be far superior to the Odan Urr Grey Jedi. Talis was disheartened to realize that even with his physical prowess being augmented by the Force, Aiden remained the stronger combatant.
Aiden began to feel the effects of the lightning again, as his mind was not focused on controlling the pain anymore. He would have to push through it though. As Talis began lashing out with his saber, Aiden stayed on the defensive, parrying each blow with ease. As time passed, Aiden could tell that Talis was slowing, as was he. His pain was slowly getting the better of him. Talis could feel his body becoming overcome with fatigue. The use of his lightning and augmenting his body was taking it’s toll.
“I won’t give up Taldryan. Not until you are dead.”
Dodging one of Talis’s strikes, Aiden rolled away, and stood back up facing away from his enemy. His mind starting to fill with sorrow.
“That is unfortunate. As i have said, I must end this.”
Talis, even in his weakened state could feel the emotions of his opponent. He felt his sorrow. He felt Aiden’s regret.
“You can’t do it. You’re too weak to take my life it seems. Why don’t you just walk away?”
Aiden steeled his heart at the Acolyte’s words. Knowing what he must do The Taldryan focused on the Force. He looked into where Talis eye’s would be and waved his hand.
“You will put down your arms and remain still.”
Having no defense against Aiden’s assault on his mind Talis grew still and disengaged his lightsaber. The hilt fell from his hands, the sound of the metal hitting stone echoed through the temple. The Odan Urr Grey Jedi spoke as if entranced.
“I will put down my arms, and remain still.”
Keeping his focus on the Acolyte, Aiden walked forward and raised his lightsaber. He truly hated to take a life, but he did what he must for Taldryan. With a graceful wave of his arm, Aiden’s amethyst blade glided through Talis’s neck with a searing hiss, and the Miralukan’s head fell from his shoulders. A tear fell from Aiden’s face as his heart blackened.
“Forgive me, forgive me for taking the life of one you so strongly gave your power to.” He spoke to the Force itself.
Aiden bent over and took the armory saber as proof of his victory, and with a heavy heart left the body, and the dark temple behind.
Capitalize "Force."
Small typo.
Sense at +1, isn't really enough to accomplish this. The full layout of an area that's beyond your line of sight would probably need at least +3 in the ability, and being a Miraluka doesn't change this fact.
In general, nothing really happens in this post. You don't really establish a reason for either character to be there, and for all intensive purposes, the reader could skip your entire post, and start with Aiden's post below without missing anything.
You only have 2 posts in a match. You can't afford to advance the plot at all in one of them.