Alishu was trembling.
He had never fought a Sith before, and it was frightening. The Sullustan was usually calm, at peace on the battlefield, and he more or less expected to see the same peace from those he fought, such was the Obelisk way. In-fact, it was because of this peace of mind that Alishu had moved so fluidly, acting almost purely on instinct as he struck out in a perfect concert of Force and Physical ability, slowing his opponent to land a wicked cut on his leg. But whatever confidence was gained from that moment of serendipity was quickly lost, scared witless in the face of the way of the Sith, Abadeer's way, where passion and rage are merged in a terrifying, ever-increasing channel that brought greater dexterity and power to each of the Togruta's moves.
A mix of fear and anger hung heavily in the air, sensed even by those outside of the training center, as their battle dance whirled across the duracrete and a deepening pool of blood.
Each of their skills was being pushed to the absolute limit, their entire beings willed to their chosen purpose. For Abadeer, that purpose was to regain his pride by defeating his opponent in the combat center, and it expressed itself in blinding rage. For Alishu, that purpose was a driving need to survive another day, and it expressed itself in a fearful calmness that caused him to tremble. Yet as the fight dragged on, neither seemed to have an advantage over the other, for as the two equally aggressive combatants threw themselves at their adversary, ground was neither taken nor given, and so they merely circled around the same, bloody spot on the floor.
In such a melee, one might determine that reach would be the deciding factor, but Abadeer's superior height was negated by Alishu's superior weight control and the aggressive nature of their fighting styles, keeping them at a close range, where longer reach had no bearing. The key then, seemed to lie in the difference between a lightsaber and a sword, a difference that was excitingly more complex than what might be assumed, enhanced by each of the combatants unique traits.
It was true that the metal used in the construction of a vibroblade could not withstand the sheer cutting power of plasma, and it was true that Abadeer's lightsaber was as much as an extension of himself as the sword was for Alishu, and that he should have no trouble destroying the Hunter's weapon. However, be that as it may, Alishu was a student of Shyarn-ado and Stava, wielding them together as a single art, and these forms did not rely on using the blade itself for defense, instead focusing on evasive, body-weaving techniques. This unorthodox style protected Alishu's weapon, and his mastery of these arts gave him an edge over Abadeer's Form Zero, which was hardly a martial art as much as it was 'How to Hold Your Lightsaber 101'. Still, Acolyte Taasii was a brilliant fighter in his own right, and even though some of his Force-enhanced speed was being spent to dull the pain in his leg, he grew faster with each deadly exchange, as his mind sank deeper into the battle and his emotions drove him onward. It would only be a matter of time before Alishu would find his sword, and perhaps himself, sliced in two. Even now he could sense Abadeer watching his every movement, probing for a single weakness that he could pounce upon.
Alishu didn't see any need to prolong the inevitable. With the last of his Force-fueled adrenaline, the Hunter stumbled quickly backwards, his footwraps, soaked in Abadeer's blood, leaving a trail of crimson footprints. Both men stood at attention, for the first time in the bout, someone had given ground. Alishu had stopped shaking.
"I give up."
"You what?" Abadeer's features twisted, his anger flaring despite his own adrenaline subsiding. As if the challenge wasn't insulting enough, now the Sullustan was insulting him again. "[Like hell you are!]" He cursed at Alishu, temporarily reverting to his native tongue, Togruti. Taasii wasn't finished yet, and while he was originally content to knock his clanmate around a bit, he figured now that a more severe punishment was in order. Perhaps an arm or a leg would suffice, or both, screw the "Accorded Neutral Territory" sign. He would push past the fatigue, the bloodloss, and the widening hole in his leg. Abadeer wouldn't stop until he paid his wounds back in full, and not just his physical wound, but the wounds to his pride as well. Bounding forward in a Force-assisted leap, the Togruta waved his hand in a focusing gesture, causing a blackness to fall over the small Sullustan, dark enough that even the entrancing light of the crimson lightsaber blade was no longer visible. The Hunter was now the hunted, unable to see.
Crimson.
What happened next happened with such alacrity that it can scarcely be described. The last thought on Alishu's mind before all went dark, now racing at a hundred miles an hour, was the sight of the red Togruta and lightsaber coming towards him. In that instant he wondered if he had somehow been knocked out or even killed, but this was quickly disproved, as both his physical and Force senses were still in place, the very same senses that were now screaming at him to move. Lurching to the side in a duck, Alishu could feel the blade of the lightsaber pass over him, the crimson color of the plasma strongly reminding him of the sensation of the wet, crimson blood on his feet.
Alishu focused hard on that feeling, until the hazy image of his adversary appeared before him, catching it as it moved out of the corner of his vision.
The Obelisk's hands seemed to move on their own against the Sith, turning the blade and thrusting it at the image poised behind him. Abadeer might have been run through right then and there, were it not for the passive echolocation ability that all Togruta possessed, alerting him to the sharp, pointy object headed his way, allowing him to twist his body and swing out with his saber at the last second.
Alishu had no idea what hit him.
###3 Hours before the match; Shadow Academy, VSDII Paladin
Alishu worked quietly in his quarters on the Paladin, typing away on a console as he made the final edits to one of the professor's history lessons. It had been just under two months since he had rejoined the Brotherhood and been assigned Magistrate to the Headmaster, and it was hard to believe how far he had come in such a short time. In a way, it was even harder to believe how much had changed since he had first gone rogue.
"You're going to be a Knight soon." Lost in thought and the darkness of his own mind, Alishu didn't notice as his master, Kul'tak, made his way into the room. The Hunter didn't reply, instead swiveling in his chair and listening intently, he had come to learn that whenever his master mentioned a coming promotion like this, it was because he had some sort of advice to give. "I heard you're going to be fighting in the combat center, against an Apostle of Syn. You should be careful, their function is different than that of the Disciples of Dreypa, but they are just as well-trained. I saw that first hand, during my time in both Battle Teams."
The Sullustan stayed silent, knowing that Kul'tak wasn't quite finished, observing as the Zabrak walked to the opposite side of the room, his footfalls nearly silent as he picked up the armory vibrosword that Alishu had wielded since he first returned to the Brotherhood.
"I trust this will be your weapon of choice?" There was a hint of a smile in his voice, an approving one, but undetectable under the recesses of his hood. "That's commendable of you, few have the courage to wield a sword in this day and age. However, I don't believe that bladework alone will carry you to victory." Kul'tak set the sword down, pivoting on his heels to face Alishu. **"You told me once that the dark side has stained your mind and that you suffer from confusion and constant mental agony. I have often sensed this pain within you, and truthfully there was a time where I thought you mad, but I see now and I tell you..."
"Let your despair fuel your anger. Then shall you eradicate your enemies."
The darkness faded away, revealing what had occurred. Abadeer's saber had struck home, impacting the side of Alishu's face, but not deep enough, separating his hood and destroying part of his goggles, but not hurting the Sullustan himself. Terrified and in shock, Alishu slowly ran his fingers over the damaged area, beginning to tremble once more. Even his knees began to shake and he swayed from side to side, barely able to keep himself upright. It all told of weakness, but this pain and sadness served as an emotional grounding that deeply strengthened his connection to the dark side, and he centered himself in it, drawing power from it. Instead of becoming weak, he became strong, renewed.
Lifting his sword once more, Alishu lunged at his opponent, swinging his sword with all the same rage as Abadeer in that initial charge.
Syntax
You don't want "Although" here, since it's used to join clauses together within one sentence. I think it's better for flow to just ditch it, although you could just tack this sentence on to the preceding on if you like. Not really dinging you for this, just offering it as advice.
Also not dinging you here, but the word choice is a bit off. "Extracting" sounds like you've got the weapon embedded in your side and you're pulling it out. "Retrieving" might be better here.
Its = belonging to it. It's = it is.
I liked this description.
Story
Remember, with the other categories, you start at 5 and just have to avoid making mistakes to score well. With Story, you start at 3 and really have to work your way up. Two ways to do that in an opening post are to avoid cliches and to give us a real reason to care about the conflict between these two characters. "Hey, I'm here, you're here, let's train" makes it really hard to rise above a 3. I know it can be really hard to build a meaningful conflict when you're tossed into a match with a character you don't know very well, but if you can find the right hook you've got a great advantage in the match.
Realism
No errors.
Continuity
No errors.