Shadows darted across vine covered walls, disturbing the eerie green and violet light upon them. Winged creatures took flight from their roosts atop the carved, bowing statues in response. They rose over the massive hall and, from their view, one could see the entire layout of the Dark Temple’s ruins. A large statue presided at the front of the hall, arms outstretched with the confidence of a Sith. Below his feet, grasses and shrubs grew through the many cracks in the old stone floor. Tall, towering pillars stood erect behind the carved figures, though time and gravity had upended a few to rest against the floor or one another.
It was behind one pillar that a figure scurried. Taking cover, Zujenia pressed her shoulder against the stone. Its cold surface sent a shiver across her mottled skin. The white haired half-Ryn inhaled deeply, attempting to lower her quickened heart rate. The haunting aura of Dromund Kaas was starting to unnerve her.
Bright lights passed by the decaying holes of the building as the sound of a craft landing echoed through the open space of the temple. A moment passed before Zujenia decided to steal a glance out, her amber eyes falling upon a silhouette in the entry. It approached further into the hall, the light shifting off the figure as the ship maneuvered from the building. She could now make out a pale, green skinned man dressed in a well-tailored suit, an odd contrast to the forest-laden ruins. His head was held high as he scanned the room, shoulders drawn back with a confidence that seeped into his stride.
Wonderful, company is here, she thought dryly. Her eyebrows furrowed in a mixture of annoyance and uneasiness. Zujenia was starting to regret taking that foolish dare to retrieve a holocron from Dromund Kaas, a feat her superiors had been badgering each other about before she chimed in behind them. As soon as they dropped her off, however, they turned the shuttle and booked it through the atmosphere like a pair of yellow-bellies would.
Those milksops better be coming back. Soon. She swallowed, a last act to gather her wits. She brushed aside the tendril of fear, determined to prove herself worthy of the Shadow Clan, and shifted the strap of her Tuskan Cycler across her chest.
A blue gaze crossed near the pillar she was settled behind. Zujenia quickly ducked back, aware her platinum hair could give away her position in this light. She held her breath, listening for footsteps coming closer. When they continued on to the side, she exhaled in relief. Zujenia creeped to the end of the pillar after picking her electrostaff up from the floor, pausing near the jagged, broken end. The man was heading to the front of the hall, the exact location she expected the holocron to be. Holding back a growl, she caught a glimpse of what looked like a lightsaber strapped to his belt.
Let’s not tangle with that, shall we, she thought.
She narrowed her eyes in concentration as she called upon the Force to shift the shadows and light around herself. Within several heartbeats, Zujenia vanished from sight. Slowly, she slinked forward behind the pillars, her hand brushing softly against them as she passed. The half-Ryn neared the Falleen, who was currently admiring the Sith statue, and halted a few meters away. A moment passed before she realized she was hesitating. Shifting her hands for a sturdier grip on her staff, she launched herself forward. Her force-fueled sprint ate the distance between them, and her hidden veil dissipated as she activated the stunning ends of the staff. Purple strands of lightning encircled the metal, arcing through the air as Zujenia brought forth a downward blow.
The staff struck against the stone floor as the Falleen rolled to the side. As soon as his feet touched the ground, he was up, jumping back and onto a crumbled stone. He raised his face towards her, a cocky smile perched upon his lips. He brushed back a ponytail of striking blond hair before placing his right hand upon his saber.
“I was wondering when you would step out to play, lovely,” he remarked suavely. His blue eyes settled on her with a superior air as Zujenia straightened her back. An eyebrow raised when the half-Ryn slid her left foot back, leveling her electrostaff to the ground. “Oh? Little mutt, you don’t possess the skill to fight me. Sit there and take in the scenery, girl. Perhaps I’ll take you out for a good time when I’ve finished my business.”
The young woman’s eyes widened, mesmerized by the slight sway in his hips. A drip of drool slipped from her mouth before, with a bat of her eyelashes, she shook her head vigorously. Brows snapping together in a glare, Zujenia’s nose crinkled as her lips set into a hard line. She spat towards the ground, maintaining her iron stare. Shifting her weight, she fought back the urge to whack that vile smirk off his face. Instead she remained quiet, not wanting to give him the satisfaction of a verbal response. All thoughts of the holocron were brushed aside. The only concern she had right now was dealing with this self-righteous scum.
Syntax:
No errors spotted. That's very rare to see, so excellent work.
Story:
First posts about about setting the stage and providing you and your opponent with the building blocks to construct a good story across all three/four posts. You definitely set the mood effectively, and provided a plausible reason for conflict. Let's see what you two do with it over the rest of the match.
Realism:
No errors spotted.
Continuity:
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