Amidst a tumble of chairs, Kordath Bleu groaned in agony. His entire face hurt, his body hurt, and the taste of whatever it was Rrogon had given him still hadn’t vacated his mouth.
Ta hell with my meeting, ta hell with Estle City, I’d like ta go home now.
With another groan he tried to disentangle himself from chair legs and backs, slowly rising to a sitting position. Glancing over the path he’d taken to land where he had, the Ryn grimaced at the dent on the nearest table. Probably why his back felt like he’d just gotten off a three day bender and woken up in an alley behind the local brothel. Slipping and sliding, he managed to find his feet among the pile of broken and twisted seats, holding a hand to his back he straightened with a moan.
The vision of Skar, a pistol in either clawed hands, approaching him made Bleu to sigh and send up a small prayer to whoever was listening. Scarlet bolts of energy cracked from the twin DL-44s, causing Kordath to grimace and bite his lip to ignore the pain as he scrambled towards a nearby table. The smell of burnt ozone and the sound of blaster bolts impacting the durasteel tables forced the Ryn to fully understand the trouble he was in. Huddling under the table, he heard more shots slam into the top of it.
“Why’d I pull a bloody knife on him? Paranoid, angry karking Kaleesh probably thought I was gonna shank him, just wanted ta cut his belt, buy some time so I could run. Bloody stupid move, Bleu, stupid!” he muttered to himself, trying to think his way out of the situation. His face throbbed — like it would for days to come, he was certain. Trying to ignore the pain and the incessant sounds of blaster fire he focused on the Force.
Another round of fire scorched the table even as Skar spotted Bleu scurrying out from under it, the Ryn climbing with surprising quickness over the next row of tables. His blasters tracked him, spitting scarlet death after the nimble Rollmaster, and he was certain he’d tagged the tailed Arconan. No cries of agony accompanied the shots though, and it was quite unlike the Ryn to be so silent when in pain. From off to the Kaleesh’s left came Kordath’s voice.
“Look, t’was a misunderstandin’, mate! What would Nath say if she saw us actin’ like this?” shouted the Ryn from under another table. His illusory double had bought him enough time to move, at least, and possibly talk down his teammate
“Mother would say not to be taken in by the Ryn’s quick tongue,” growled the angry Agrona.
“Hah, fair point. And we talked about callin’ our former Master ‘mum,’ didn’t we?”
“She cared for us both, Kordath, she taught us both!”
“That don’t make her mum! And she calmed down a lot by the time she got ta you, I guess!” Bleu shouted from under his cover, moving slowly to prepare himself for another run. “Not ta mention, after that last party a few months back, thinkin’ of her as ‘mum’ don’t scan with me.”
A rapid succession of bolts peppered the floor near Kordath, causing him to scuttle back once more.
“Are you trying to anger me further, you walking womprat? Do you really think that’s a good idea!?”
Well talkin’ him down didn’t work. Make him madder? Maybe he’ll lose focus. Bugger it, maybe I can get away then.
“Make ya mad? Mate, you’re always mad! ‘Sides, what was we talkin’ bout? Oh, right, Nath, yeah. The party, you recall?” Kordath let out a sigh as he pushed out with the Force, scrambling one way while another projection ran the other. Luck was with him this time, Skar choosing to fire at the double as he dived under another table. “That party, with the dress, yeah? Well, if ya could call it a dress, hah!”
This time the only reply was more blaster fire and a loud growl.
“More like a collection of wee leather straps. I mean, you could bleedin’ hear it creak whenever she moved. And how she could move, eh, Skar me boy? You trained more combat with her than I ever did, you know how fit she is!”
Again Bleu gathered the Force, taking a deep breath as he and the illusion he summoned parted ways. This time the Ryn felt a searing pain his shoulder, a blaster bolt spinning him around and throwing him to the ground again. With a groan he rolled onto his back, looking up to find Skar standing above him.
“Was just a drink, mate, didn’ mean nothin’ by it,” he managed to mutter out.
“Your illusions lack heat, Kordath. You would be wise to remember I can see in that spectrum. And it wasn’t ‘just a drink,’ it was a cordial. You were meant to sip it, not down it like one of your whiskey shots, you filthy hobo of a Ryn.”
“Why,” gasped out Kordath as the Kaleesh put a boot on his chest, “would ya give me a stuffed shirt drink like that, mate? Good barkeep knows what his clients want, your fault more than mine.”
“You insult my talent as a bartender, you insult our Mother with your comments, and you insult my intelligence by sending your illusions out in an attempt to scurry away like the rodent you are. You’ll be crawling when you go to your meeting with the Shadow Lady,” snarled Rrogon, lifting his boot off the Ryn’s chest. It came down, hard, on Kordath’s left ankle, sending a snapping sound throughout the quiet mess hall.
Syntax
Second comma here is superfluous.
The comma here introduces a soft paus that breaks the flow of the sentence.
After a couple seconds pause I got the "broken thought pattern" you were going for here. An ellipses instead of a period full stop could have made it a bit more easily conveyed to the reader.
While two separate meanings of "back", it is still repetitious and alternatives should be used.
Story
You didn't have a whole lot of combat here, though you did set the scene and initiate the conflict. Just would have liked to see a bit more. Perhaps even Bleu fighting back in his own way rather than just being tossed about.