Drip. Drip. Drip...
Pure crystalline water fell in a steady rhythm of droplets from the menacing icicles looming from what passed for a ceiling within the icy cavern. The liquid caught the dull glow of the lichen growths as it fell, refracting the light in a shimmering cascade that darted around the cave. Even this far down, the storm raging on the surface could be heard as an echoing roar bouncing through the winding paths to the waiting ears of those within.
A threatening growl from somewhere deeper seemed to answer the echo but never drew closer. Whatever produced the sound appeared to be content where they were for the moment. That fact suited the bundled form huddled within the cavern just fine. Pale, pointed ears stood prominently against the dark strands of hair that peaked out from the trappings of the clearly Tusken robes. The tribal markings were a declaration of her tribe, though none other than her people would recognize them. The armor intermingled amongst the fabric was the Sephi's own additions and marked her as something more... something dangerous. Outwardly, she seemed unphased by the cold as her blank, almost unblinking stare flit between the various openings that surrounded her, but inside she was thankful for what small warmth she had found there. Her Tuk'ata companion was similarly thankful, having curled in upon itself at her side. A mechanical hand rose from beneath her snow-dusted cloak and fell against the Tuk'ata's side in a rare show of affection.
Well, it would have been rare if the recipient had been anything other than the loyal beast. Creatures, as always, remained the Sephi's favoured companions over any so-called sentient species. She may have been many things — from One Sith to Aedile of House Marka Ragnos — but she would always remain an adherent of traditions. Ophelia Delacroix was determined to honor her Tusken upbringing. Yet, she now found herself hiding from the unforgiving storms of Hoth, an ice planet distant from any civilization worth mentioning. It was a far cry from the sun-bleached sands of Tatooine.
What had brought her there was even stranger. The Rollmaster of Naga Sadow, Marcus Kiriyu, was not one prone to bringing tasks directly to the members of House Summit. No, he preferred to keep to the Journeymen themselves, and his own machinations. That was fine enough seeing as Ophelia had little interest in playing such games. She hadn't survived the One Sith and placed herself within the ranks of the Dark Brotherhood without at least that much survival instinct.
Yet the request had been tendered to the Quaestor of Marka Ragnos and, by way of Tasha'Vel, fell on Ophelia to comply. The Sephi couldn't help but wonder exactly what she had done to deserve such cruelty before her body once more gave way to a series of teeth clattering shudders in an attempt to generate further warmth. It certainly wasn't inclining the woman towards becoming more 'sociable' with her Clanmates.
Travel to these coordinates on Hoth and await the contact.
That had been the request that took Ophelia from the safety of the Orian System — and the might of the Sadowan Warhost — and into the frozen tundra. By all rights it had better be worth it because there was no way in Malachor that she would be able to justify it any other way.
A cloud of breath formed in the space in front of Ophelia as she let out a long sigh. Her pale, almost sickly colored fingers reached up to brush the last remnants of frost from her eyebrows before becoming utterly still. The Tuk'ata beside her growled quietly as it rose with its spines bristling. Fangs flashed as its mouth began to open and its jowls visibly quivered along with the threatening sound. Ophelia's gaze was locked on the climbing rope dangling through the opening of the fissure high in the glacial wall as it swayed back and forth from a sudden weight on the line.
Was it the contact... or some*thing* else?
The former One Sith drew her trappings tighter around her in an attempt to gather what warmth she could. It never hurt to be prepared after all. Her talon-fingered prosthetic remained assuringly affixed to the Tuk'ata's side, a subtle act to keep the beast from charging unnecessarily. A large form clad in a black cloak came into view and Ophelia instantly reached out with her senses. She felt the cold, familiar taint of the dark side swell within her before pushing tendrils of focus towards the descending being and felt... nothing.
More like next to nothing, at least. Ophelia sensed that this man was no Force sensitive, but he did have a partial affinity for the light. It was a feeling she had experienced more than once in the presence of Clan Naga Sadow's Proconsul, Sanguinius. The sensation never failed to make the Aedile want to gag. This man, at least, was subtle enough for her to stomach. Ophelia just needed to retrieve whatever intel the newcomer had to offer and she could be on her way, and free of Hoth.
At least, that's what she thought until the man's black boots crunched into the snow covered floor of the cavern and he turned to face her. His face was expressionless, cold, and quite similar to what she saw in the mirror every morning.
It was the face of a man who would kill without so much as blinking.
Immediately, Ophelia's senses and perception were at odds with each other. She knew what she felt when she reached out in the Force, and yet what she saw was far too familiar to be ignored... and Ophelia was too intelligent not to trust what she recognized there.
"I expected Tasha'Vel," the man stated plainly. A soft lilt, nearly imperceptible, somehow softened his words but the chill was as unmistakable as the cold of Hoth itself. His black gloved left hand rose from beneath his cloak and pushed his hood back to reveal messy, near black hair pulled back into a ponytail. His fingers ran along his tightly trimmed beard as his gray, gold-flaked eyes took in Ophelia and her Tuk'ata. "Her Aedile then, I presume?"
"And you are?" Ophelia asked the man. Her voice was low and filled with the promise of violence. The man paused, as if the answer required a concerted effort to ascertain, then dropped his hand to the side and turned his gaze to take in the finer details of the cavern without replying. Ophelia was too new a Sadowan to have recognized the supposedly fallen former Quaestor of Shar Dakhan. If it had been Tasha'Vel in her place, Atra Ventus would require no introductions whatsoever.
As it was, Atra had fallen off the grid before settling into his role as Praetor to the Voice, and had remained reclusive in that regard. At least until his hand was forced. "Your clan has caused the deaths of many Inquisitors, Aedile," Atra continued, as if Ophelia had never spoken. "Actions have consequences."
The former One Sith snarled in kind with her Tuk'ata as the hilt of her saberstaff pressed into her palm. The unmistakable hum of the plasma blades filled the space around them after they hissed to life. The weapon's red glow danced across the icy surface of the walls while Ophelia focused on the obvious threat. Clearly, the Praetor cared little for subtlety. It would have been a refreshing change of pace if it hadn't been so clear a threat. Ophelia reached out towards the man and took hold of her power once more. She revelled in the chilling presence that surged through her before commanding it to slither like snakes through the avenues of Atra's mind.
The Praetor's eyes danced between the Tuk'ata and Ophelia with predatory focus, but something began to feel... off. Doubt was the first crack in his mental armor. It was doubt in his purpose there, a wavering of his resolve. What if he couldn't do what he knew needed to be done no matter how unpalatable it may seem? Uncertainty gave way to fear. The fear of failure was always one of the most primal that loomed within the subconscious of most sentients.
Atra's focus was split — that much he knew — between his self-control and concealing his abilities. That created a handicap the former One Sith had unknowingly capitalized upon. Closing his eyes, the Umbaran pushed back at the looming threat within his own mind. He released the bindings he had placed upon himself and felt the power swelling to the surface once more.
The shock to his system was like diving into a glacial pool, burning and chilling in equal parts as it coursed through his body. The Praetor took a metaphorical hold of that power and channeled it into his control, his sense of self. He crashed it against the clawing tendrils of Ophelia's presence that threatened to push him into the depths of terror, forcing control upon the dominion of his mind.
Ophelia's hand snapped back and a look of surprise flashed for a moment upon her tattooed face. She had expected some resistance to her machinations, but nothing like this. In that instant, the Aedile knew she had been taken in by a false sense of security. A confidence in her senses that had failed to gleam Atra's true nature. There was no mistaking the dark side of the Force. It had its own distinctive flavor, as it were.
Atra's right arm shifted beneath his cloak as his fingers slipped around the familiar weight of his lightsaber. The synthetic crystal coating the hilt provided firm grooves for his fingers to slip into before closing tightly around the weapon. He unclipped it from his belt and pushed the cloak back with a roll of his shoulder. Goosebumps rippled across his pale flesh as his scarred arm was exposed to the elements with nothing but gray fabric wrapped around his forearm. His thumb passed over the red activator and ignited the weapon. The pale, silvery glow of his blade joined the crimson hue of Ophelia's weapon as crackling surges worked up and down along the beam.
Ophelia cursed in a tongue he did not recognize, which caused the Umbaran to tilt his head curiously. Her eyes flicked away for the briefest of moments towards the Tuk'ata as she spoke again in the same tongue, though different words. The beast howled excitedly and charged forward having apparently been given the order to attack. Atra's gloved hand raised in response, making a grasping gesture that was mirrored by the invisible presence of the Force. The Tuk'ata yelped in both surprise and pain as Atra's power constricted around its throat and lifted it slowly into the air. Straightening his head once more, the Praetor sighed before throwing his hand to the side. The beast was sent crashing into the frigid wall with a significantly solid sounding thud before falling through one of the vein-like tunnels reaching deeper towards the core.
Rage flushed through Ophelia in an instant. She could sense the creature was still alive but that only mattered to a rational mind. The Sephi, who had been raised Tusken, just saw her only true companion hurt before her eyes and dealing that pain back to the perpetrator became her only focus. Ophelia stepped forward and threw her body into a tight pivot before tossing her saberstaff forward. As the weapon left her hand she captured it in the Force and directed it towards the object of her anger. The red double-blades spun with such speed they appeared to blur together.
As the blade came ever closer, Atra took a step back in order to present his profile and minimize the target area. A twisting of Ophelia's wrist tugged on the blade mid-air and caused it to arc at an angle, which forced the Praetor to lean awkwardly to avoid harm. Ophelia didn't bother waiting for the weapon to complete its arc and return to her hand. Instead, she reached out with her taloned hand and adjusted her focus, directing the Force using her off hand as a focusing agent while all of her rage was channeled down her right arm. A burst of energy crackled through the air with snaking tendrils of lightning lashing out at her opponent.
Atra's saber flipped upright before him, catching the tendrils with his shielded blade as he fought for better footing on the icy floor. The Sadowan Aedile was still advancing on Atra as she caught her spiraling blade and used the weapon's momentum to pivot about into a lateral spin. Her weapon hummed dangerously through the air before crashing downward upon Atra. His crackling blade caught the leading tip of her oncoming saber and guided it down and to the right before he stepped forward to meet her.
Again Ophelia maintained the momentum of her initial attack using it to carry her unrelenting offense onward. Pivoting to offer her back for the briefest of moments, the Sephi adjusted her grip and brought the bottom blade of her saberstaff around to cleave the Praetor's head from his neck. His vibrant blade met hers once more, forcing a saber lock as he gripped the hilt with both hands against the ferocity Ophelia brought to bear. Their eyes locked momentarily before Atra allowed his arms to buckle slightly and then push hard back against the clash. The act of strength broke their momentary pause as Ophelia danced several steps back.
"I take it those were friends of yours, huh?" Ophelia remarked, referring back to his earlier mention of the Inquisitors.
Atra pivoted once more to face the Sephi fully while holding his overcharged weapon off to the side. "No, just my responsibility," he replied.
Syntax:
Three errors in a five page post. Well done!
The DB implementation of Markdown doesn't support mid-word italics, and the site won't render user-entered HTML, so I think the only way to do what you intended is to break it up as "some thing".
Story:
This is a solid introduction. You set the stage in all aspects: the environment, Atra's motivation, Ophelia's motivation, and their relationship, however nebulous it might be.
Realism:
No detractors. Excellent use of both characters, particularly Ophelia's Terror of the Sands Aspect.
Continuity:
No detractors.