The Kel Dor held his attack at bay, his saber gripped two handed and pointing straight up towards the domed ceiling high above them. He wanted to rush the Warrior, but he knew his advantage did not lie in a straight duel. They were equally competent saberists, there was no mistaking that, but Kor Vaal had done his research on his opponent before their encounter and he knew where Delak’s strengths lay. The human’s defensive style was not the issue here; all walls could be broken eventually. It was the endurance that lay behind the lightsaber which gave the Knight pause and Kor knew there was little chance his stamina would hold out long enough to breach the Warrior’s defences. He needed to get Delak’s lightsaber away from him. But how? He stole a quick glance at his surroundings. The pod they were in was no more than fifty feet in diameter and sparsely furnished, containing nothing but some large barrels pushed to the edges opposite the door. There would be little to help him there.
“I’m disappointed Kor,” Delak mocked, “I expected some actual fight from you.”
Kor ignored the barb. He needed to think of some way to gain the advantage, if only for a moment. But there was nothing here he could use, not even any Gungans. There were two stationed outside the pods sealed entrance, but they had their backs to the duel taking place. Were they purposely ignoring what was going on in their city? Did the Consul’s influence stretch this far? He pushed the thought aside, it mattered little at the present.
“Do you hope to win by me dying of old age, Knight?” Delak continued. Kor Vaal said nothing.
The Kel Dor’s thoughts drifted back to the guards and, more specifically, the entrance to their pod. Kor was closest to it, he could get out, but Delak would simply follow him. Kor couldn’t exactly trap him here. He could try and breach the circular walls of the pod and flood the place, but he had no idea if his lightsaber would properly disrupt the bubble’s force-field. Would Delak know either?
The Warrior relaxed his stance. “If this is what passes for a Knight in Excidium now, I worry for the future of the Clan.”
“Worry not,” Kor replied, “You may not see that future”.
He had his plan now. Delak’s indignation died on his lips as Kor ran at him, swinging his saber in a wide arc at the human’s midriff. Delak spun his saber down and around to knock the blow aside, and the Kel Dor went with the movement, spinning and striking down to Delak’s right. Delak stepped back and blocked again, but Kor Vaal kept up his momentum, swinging and thrusting in an unrelenting barrage as the screech of deflecting sabers reverberated dully from the domed chamber. The human’s defence was impenetrable, and he weathered the onslaught of blows, giving up as little ground as he could, but Kor didn’t need to push him back too far. Just far enough. Delak parried an overhead blow and suddenly Kor broke away, retreating back towards the bubble’s entrance, his breathing fast and heavy through his face mask.
“So you do have some fight in you,” mused Delak as he sank back into his defensive posture, showing little fatigue from the exchange.
“I do. Enough to push you marginally away from the exit. Tell me Delak Krennel,” Kor inched closer to the curved wall, “How much water do you think these pods can fill with before they automatically seal?”
Kor raised his lightsaber to swing at the pods wall, and Delak’s face suddenly contorted with angry realisation. “No!” he shouted as he started running. Delak only had one option, and he hurled his lightsaber at Kor, the red blade spinning end over end. The Kel Dor brought his blade back, knocking his opponents saber to the side and instantly shot his left hand out, his fingers curling into a tight claw as he drew on the Force and cast all the hatred he could muster at the human. Delak stumbled with the sudden shock of Force disconnection, losing the pull he was exerting to return his saber to his hand and it passed just above his reaching fingers, extinguishing and skittering away from him. The human skidded to a halt, his awareness snapping back just in time to duck beneath the Kel Dor’s blue blade as it swung for his neck. Delak spun and drove the Force hard into his legs, trying to rush back to his fallen weapon, but not fast enough. He felt the kiss of Kor’s weapon slice into his left calf as he lunged, not deep enough to cripple him but enough that a shout of pain escaped him. Still he managed to clear the Kel Dor’s reach, crashing onto his side. Delak flicked his hand out and his saber flew into his hand. Fighting through the pain in his leg, the Warrior ignited his saber and pushed himself to one knee, swinging his blade up just in time to block an overhead swing from Kor.
Syntax
To start, before anything else, you need to separate out your paragraphs a lot more frequently. You are leaving large walls of text that make the flow rather trying for a reader. Breaking it up more will give your reader a mental break and make it easier to consume large amounts.
Should be "like it [was] made of glass"
I'd throw in a hard return between these two sentences. Good place to put in a pause before continuing on.
Should be "there" not "here".
The verbage here is odd. Would better to use "long" instead of "slow".
The capital on "Capital" is unneeded.
This feels unfinished, clipped.
It should be "blaster's".
Repetition of "stories", try to change it up.
It should be: for nothing," Delak scoffed. It's a case of "he said, she said" which is part of the same sentence as the dialogue.
You shouldn't have dialogue from two separate individuals in the same paragraph.
Again, should be a comma in the dialogue.
Should be "slightly".
Should be: Delak fended off the blows one by one, avoiding every attack by parrying them away with his blade.
Should have maintained the clipped sentences you were using here as well, instead of a comma. Additionally, when using that style of narrative pacing it really helps to break it up more into paragraphs. This section is where it hurts you the most for the reader.
Should be "off guard".
Should be "enemy's" unless he has split into several.
Should have commas around "stumbling a bit".
Realism
Where did the armor come from? The CS description of your opponent describes clearly that he wears overlapping robes with a cloak. Should also be clear that it is a glancing blow, as a full blow (even to armor) would cleave through.
General Comments
You're lucky I can't take off points for referencing Jar Jar.