The Taldryan embellished his threat with a burst of electrical energy, the tendrils arcing from tree to tree before sputtering out with a spark and a sizzle. Kul’tak barely registered the eruptions of volatile energy as it sundered the branches around him. His thoughts were focused entirely on the woeful cries of the Vornskr as it died.
He had known himself to accidentally influence the creatures around him when his blood began to boil (it did not seem to matter whether from rage or excitement). Perhaps it was a subconscious act of using his surroundings, or maybe it was just easier for him to connect with his beastly brethren during times of aggression. Regardless, his intense connection with creatures often left him vulnerable to their pain.
The Zabrak crashed to his knees and gripped his head with his hands as the swirling emotions overtook his need to focus on dodging lightning blasts. Despair had knocked him down and he gazed in the direction of the Vornskr’s corpse, the mental agony as fresh as during his target’s fatal swing.
The older man stepped into view, a gloved hand sliding across a trunk as he supported his trek down a slope pitted with rocks. He gave Kul a curious look before advancing.
“Decided to give up, boy? You seemed so eager to match yourself with me before.”
The Taldryan drew a saber, directing its humming crimson blade at the kneeling Zabrak.
“Stand.”
Kul’s eyes refocused and his gaze shifted to his enemy’s where they locked in defiance of one another. Andrelious recognized a difference in Kul’s from earlier, however. Instead of just the deep amalgamation of orange and red hues, they stood out as a brighter shade of mostly red. A quick probe with the Force revealed Kul’s presence to be swelling with a deep hatred. It swirled recklessly around him, lighting his position clearly in the Force spectrum. An odd mistake for an assassin to make, the Taldryan noted.
When the Zabrak still refused to stand, the Imperial waved his empty left hand.
“I said stand, boy.”
Kul lurched slightly, as if pushed to his task, and stood. He squinted as he tried to understand why he’d moved early, but his end goal was unchanged by it. He let his wrath run free; its infused power gave him assurance as it flowed through his limbs.
Andrelious was no fool. He knew something was coming, but not what trick the young Zabrak might attempt. Surely he wasn’t planning to assault him head on again? That had gotten him nowhere. The manifestation of power through his anger meant the strike would come soon.
Almost too soon. The Zabrak’s sudden burst of agility threw the Taldryan off enough for the younger to move closer than he might have hoped. His clawed left gauntlet drove for Andrelious’ chest, which he was able to fend off with a quick side parry. He realized too late that it had been a feint. Kul’s empty hands moved faster than the Taldryan’s eyes could follow. He could not tell what specific martial technique it was, but he soon found himself lacking of a saber.
Staying in motion, Kul slipped his own saber back into his right hand, waving Andrelious’ somewhat uncomfortably in his left. He swung both in a scissor motion with the hope of slicing his opponent in two. The far more experienced man was able to counter with a dodge and managed to reveal his second saber, a black and red hilt as opposed to his original's chromium. Sabers flashed as the two began a martial dance utilizing their respective styles. Andrelious found himself trying a bit harder than earlier as the Zabrak fell into his style’s full stance, shifting his weight to his center and directing the Taldryan’s blade with increased strength.
Even while backing slowly, Andrelious was still aware he had the advantage in this fight. No matter how many times Kul’s weaving strikes slipped by the Taldryan’s defense, he could not finish with a lethal strike before being forced back into a defensive swing. The power was there, yes, but the technique was lacking. Still, if he did not finish this, the Zabrak may find another brief moment of advantage and take control. Or even his life.
As Kul followed through from a parry, he brought a saber downward while the other thrust forward to gore his opponent. Choosing to sweep aside the thrust, Andrelious ignored the high swing as he thrust forward his left hand. A mass of invisible energy exploded into Kul’s chest and he was flung violently against a tree. The moss could only soften such a blow so much, and a sickening crack resounded through the trees. Kul rose to his feet, his body drained of energy and his breaths ragged as his enraged state was forcibly turned off. He’d reached a physical limit and Andrelious saw this, pushing his advantage. Instead of kinetic energy this time lightning tendrils clawed forth and grasped Kul’s body, wrapping it like a blue-white cocoon.
The Taldryan halted the flow of energy and watched while Kul fell to his knees, clutching a limp arm in his left hand. He approached the wounded Zabrak. Stopping a few paces away, he bent and swiped up his saber and returned it to his waist. Kul made no move to attack or defend himself. Plastered across his face was a crooked grin, and his voice choked forth in a raspy whisper.
“They were right, you are skilled.”
Andrelious huffed.
“You challenged Andrelious J. Mimosa-Inahj.”
A spark of recognition lit up Kul’s weary eyes.
“Ah, a Taldryan. I could not have asked for a better test in strength. I am satisfied. Do what you must, I am prepared to taste death at the hands of a true warrior.”
Andrelious’ face became shadowed by a sinister smile.
“You must not have learned of how I treat those who would seek to kill me, boy.”
With his saber still humming its vibrant red hue, he slid the blade suddenly across Kul’s throat. The Zabrak’s windpipe caught as air was denied him and his eyes grew wide in shock and pain. His chokes filled the Taldryan with pride as he soaked the sound in until the Zabrak fell to the dirt with a wet thud. A drop of blood stuck out on Andrelious’ breastplate and he flicked it to the ground before continuing on into the jungle. The shadows of the forest grew shorter as the sun raced towards its zenith.
Syntax
I did have to take a look at this, and found that you should have applied the past tense to bode. It should have read "This boded ill."
Story
This is beautiful imagery. Ease up on the thesaurus a bit. The description is fantastic, but you could get your reader a little bit lost in the floweriness of it.
Realism
Kul'tak only has a +2 in Concealment, and the wording is very particular that you cannot use it while in combat.