"What, are you going to kill me? Inyri asked incredulously. "For refusing to betray my master?"
Locke let a slight smile touch his lips, though he suspected she could not see it. He advanced slowly toward the place where he thought she was hidden. His hand felt better, but the Augur was still not sure how well he could use it.
"Why don't you come find out?" he asked tauntingly, knowing that Inyri wouldn't actually fall for it. He was just talking to fill the gap in time as he approached where she was likely hiding. Locke had to be on his guard. Though Inyri was only an Acolyte; he could not wield a lightsaber. The Augur knew that underestimating his opponent could lead to his own downfall.
He stepped beyond the place in the array of bones where Inyri had disappeared and slowly turned around, attempting to gather the Force. Without his dominant hand, it would have to serve as his primary weapon. Instead of finding it, the Augur experienced something completely different, alarm welling up inside him. The Force seemed to slip away, to linger just out of reach. It was as if he was lunging for it, but could not reach it.
She couldn't have, he thought. Locke spun around, searching for Inyri. He saw her behind him, slowly advancing with a look of determination on her face. She had her blaster in hand, but didn't fire.
"I guess shooting one's Consul wouldn't go very well," she said wryly," even after being threatened by him." Instead, the Acolyte quickly stepped forward and swung her blaster toward Locke's head.
He ungracefully tried to block it with his left arm, wincing as bone cracked from the blow. The Augur gasped and dropped the arm, but Inyri didn't stop. Her next strike glancingly caught his head, causing Locke's vision to waiver.
Her next one is going to knock me out, he thought, slightly panicked. He was frustrated at being so overcome by a Journeyman, but he could not harness that frustration. The Force still lay just out of reach. His lightning and telekinesis were both out of reach. Somehow, Locke would have to survive without them.
I have to disrupt her focus somehow, he thought. His right hand dropped to his belt, gripping one of the detonators there. The Augur fumbled with the primer, but it was enough to give his opponent pause. She stopped, glancing at it as Locke slowly retreated backward.
"You wouldn't," she said. "You would kill us both."
"I would die," Locke gasped, his head pounding from the earlier blow, "undefeated." Finally, his fumbling fingers found the primer and there was a whining sound as the weapon primed for detonation.
Inyri started to step backward, keeping her eyes on Locke. He tried to reach the Force again, but it still wasn't there.
That left him with more desperate measures.
Locke quickly extended his right arm and threw the detonator in Inyri's general direction. It went far wide of where she was, but was quick enough to give her pause. The Shadow ducked for cover as Locke did the same. There was a loud crack as the detonator exploded, followed by a plume of dirt in the air.
This time, when he tested the Force, Locke found it just as he usually did. The Augur quickly seized it and expanded his Force senses, slowly detecting Inyri's presence. He had let his guard down before, but told himself that he would not now. He knew roughly where she had gone. This time, he would be more careful, lest he be injured more. The Augur's left arm ached where Inyri's pistol had struck it, while his head throbbed from where it had been hit.
Grimly determined, Locke reached for a nearby bone with the Force. It was a thin, curved thing. He didn't know what part of the rancor it had belonged to, but it would do for a Force-carried projectile.
"Alright, you win," Locke said. "You've proven yourself. Come out." He prepared to throw the bone.
His only answer was laughter, but he did hear a rustling to his side. Locke turned toward it in time to see Inyri. He lifted the bone and prepared to send it toward her with the Force.
"I'm not sure that's a good idea, " she said, pointing above him with one hand, her other arm outstretched toward a point above his head.
Locke glanced up to see half a rancor jaw floating in the air above his head. He chuckled slightly. He had been so intent on not being taken by surprise again that, with his injuries, the Augur had not noticed Inyri using the Force herself.
"I suppose if I break your concentration, it'll fall on my head, " Locke said. "Very funny."
He knew he didn't have much of a choice, but still refused to lose. Gathering his Force energy, Locke enhanced his leg muscles, temporarily boosting their abilities.
Then he threw the bone he was holding toward Inyri.
He wasn't sure if it was the bone's velocity or that she just didn't expect him to do it so suddenly, but the bone pierced the side of her body before slicing into the mud behind her. At the same moment, Locke dived sideways, rolling into the mud and narrowly avoiding the rancor jaw as it slammed down behind him.
It took him a few moments to stand up without the use of his dominant arm, but finally Locke was able to do so. His clothes were caked in mud, making them feel heavier as he slowly turned toward Inyri to see her clutching her side, the glint of blood on her fingertips.
He slowly stepped toward her, making a show of using his right hand to gather the Force and suspend a second bone in the air, positioning it to strike at her more precisely.
"I think you're done," Locke said. "Don't do anything stupid."
"Fine," Inyri said, "I'll report on Teu for you." She seemed fairly sincere, but something about the Acolyte's body language told Locke she was lying.
"Good," Locke said. "Now, as a final test, I'm sure you'll be able to handle that wound yourself. I'll call us a shuttle."
He stepped away to do so, glancing at her as he fished out his comlink with some difficulty. When he was done, he smiled and turned back to Inyri.
"Oh, by the way, I assume you aren't actually going to spy for me," he said.
"What?" she asked, feigning surprise at his accusation.
"It was a test. You don't have to. But you should tell her to socialize sometime."
"Figures, that seemed unlike what I've heard of you," she said.
"Looks can be deceiving, " Locke said, "but then, you already knew that."
After that, they quietly waited for their distress call to be answered.
Syntax
This sentence is a bit awkward, "as she traversed [...]" just doesn't fit here.
Story
I really liked this line, it helped illustrate the older/younger Force user dynamic in the story.
Overall this was a strong first post. You used both CS well, set up a believable conflict and had a strong amount of action. The "testing a new member" premise is a classic, but you managed to give it enough of a unique spin that it was an interesting read.
Difficult to start a sentence with "and" but the sentence falls apart grammatically even if you were excusing it stylistically.