Tangles of fear, doubt, worry, dread, betrayal, and rage swarmed within Alara’s mind. The emotions were so overbearing that Alara let out a sob. It was too late. She would never get her sister back again. Now she would have to either fight her sister to the death. She knew it would be hers. Alara focused and conjured up all the strength and emotion she had. My rage is all I have left. I’ve lost her, but I haven’t lost the power within myself. Not yet! The Knight let out a battle cry, leapt a bit closer, held her saber up in the air, and swung down at Shadow. The Battlemaster’s lightsaber crashed with hers in the knick of time before Alara chopped off her sister’s left shoulder. Shadow pushed so hard against her sister’s grip that it shook with exhaustion. The eldest began to sweat. She’s much better than me in duelling with sabers... How do I get her to let go of her own? An idea popped into her brain immediately as it was called upon. The Sergeant nodded to herself and pushed against her sister’s grip. She made a quick step back. As Shadow was about to thrust her saber downwards towards Alara, the Knight formed a quick shield with the Force. The impact of the saber upon the shield banged loudly, and forced Shadow to release her grip on the saber’s hilt. Alara took down the shield, chucked her saber to the side, and stepped towards her sister.
“No weapons, Sister. Let’s use the strength our parents gave us,” Alara glared, shaping her hands into fists.
Shadow hesitated, tucked her elbows beside her hips and prepared for the battle. She gave a nod to her sister. Alara pivoted her hips to an angle and kept her fists parallel to her hips. The two waited to see who would attack first.
Due to her impatience of course, it was Alara. She let out a huff and swung her right fist to meet Shadow’s right cheek. The Battlemaster gracefully swung herself to the left, dodging the hit, and managed to make contact onto Alara’s pivoted leg with hers. Alara let out a yelp, but regained her balance. Instinctively, the Apprentice pivoted herself to face her opponent properly. The eldest dove in for another punch, this time using the left fist. It made slight impact to Shadow’s side. Shadow lurched away to miss most of the impact and let out a grunt. The Battle Team Leader lifted her knee to hit her sister in the chest. Alara’s diaphragm was emptied suddenly, leaving the Sephi gasping for air as she stumbled to the ground. The Sergeant jumped back up quickly, only to find that her sister had disappeared.
“Oh Alara, foolish silly Alara. I suppose I should have trained you better in combat. Too late for that now, I suppose…” Shadow’s voice echoed as if it was part of the forest’s breeze around them.
“If you’re such a strong master, come out and face me!” Alara shouted, sweat dripping down her brow.
Shadow pounced towards her sister from a branch and whacked Alara’s skull with her elbow. The Knight let out a yelp and went face first into the ground. A deep cackle resonated in the blonde Sephi's mind.
“You can’t escape your fate now, Alara. I will destroy you,” her sister stepped around Alara’s right. With a growl, Alara spun her legs and tripped her sister to the ground.
“You think it will be so easy?” Alara chuckled. She sprung from the ground and punched as hard as she could directly into her sister’s left rib cage. A crack vibrated through her fingers as the Apprentice managed to break a bone. Shadow let out a cry, and reached out her hand towards Alara. Suddenly darkness and whispers flooded the Knight’s ears. Alara screamed and fell to the ground, her head in her hands. Her whole body began to shake violently. Cries squeezed out of her panting lungs.
“That’s right Alara… let the fear consume you. You know you can’t defeat me. And you won’t,” Shadow’s voice sharply pierced Alara’s ears. Alara blinked rapidly, trying to see around her, but she could not find light at any angle she glanced towards. Fear crept up her spine like a spider ready to pounce on its prey.
“YOU WON’T GET AWAY WITH THIS,” Alara roared through her fright, trying to intimidate her sister once more.
“What do you mean, you think someone is coming for you? No no, Alara. Why would they? You have no family now.”
“I REALLY THOUGHT IT WOULD BE BETTER FOR US!” the Knight shrieked, slamming her eyes shut as tears poured from her cheeks.
“THAT WAS THE LAST TIME YOU’LL EVER TRY TO CHOOSE MY HAPPINESS FOR ME!” Shadow boomed. Suddenly Alara felt impact upon the base of her skull, and she dropped to the ground. Blood began to stream from her nose and the corner of her mouth.
It was as if the whole forest went silent. For a few breaths, even the wind stayed quiet. Shadow stood above her sister’s body that lay in a pile of leaves. She stared at her, being sure that her apprentice wouldn’t move. She merely paralyzed her sister temporarily, but wanted to be sure of her actions. As soon as she felt her older sister would not wake, Shadow collapsed to the ground from exhaustion and tears. Her parents were gone… There was no retrieving them now. There was no amount of Force Power she could reach that would be able to bring back their smiling faces to this universe.
“SHADS! ARE YOU THERE?” Brandon’s voice echoed throughout the forest, snapping Shadow out of the daze her sorrow held her in.
“Yes, Love. Over here,” Shadow stated, sitting up from her position to look at what she had done.
“WHOA! Alara! Is she okay? What happened?! Are you okay?!” Brandon jumped at the sight of his sister-in-law on the ground and ran towards his wife. He immediately placed his hand upon her forehead, looking around for blood and cuts.
“I’m not hurt. Just a broken rib. Alara will not wake for a while,” Shadow’s gaze froze upon her sister’s face. The blonde’s cheeks were stained with blood, mud, and tears.
“What should we do, leave her here?” Brandon spoke solemnly, trying to piece together what happened in his mind.
“I suggest we stick her in a cave somewhere. She will wake eventually and will need cover. However I’m never going to see this woman’s face again unless I have to. She’s betrayed our heritage.”
“I… Uh… Okay. Whatever you want Babes,” Brandon scooped up his sister-in-law in his arms, and began running to the nearest cave. Shadow sat in her same position, refusing to move. She pulled her hood over her head and closed her eyes.
Oh Alara, why did you make this happen? Why did you make me do this to you?
She sat there for quite some time until her husband came back to the scene. He walked toward his bride, and scooped her up in his arms, “Let’s go, my love. I’ll bring you to see a medical bay.”
Shadow nodded and cuddled into her lover’s chest. She let out a few tears, but stayed quiet. She knew nothing would be the same between her and her older apprentice again.
Realism
Alara's Character Sheet makes no mention of Sephi parentage. If you want to make use of her half-Sephi characteristics in an ACC match, make sure it is reflected in the CS.
The circumstances—Shadow is running through thick woods—and the Character Sheet—Shadow has +1 in Telekinesis—make this use of Telekinesis difficult to excuse. At this level Shadow requires a few seconds of full concentration to use the Force power.
A number of the ACC Judges have looked at this and we agree that there are no examples in Canon Star Wars material for outright “glowing” eyes. We see Anakin’s eyes change in colour during moments of passion in Episode III, but not glow with light. It is a minor issue with imagery, so no points were docked for this, but keep in mind that ACC Realism relies foremost on the Disney definition of Canon.
Syntax
While you do set the pace very well here, these two actions are mechanically separate. "Alara gasped and spun around," could have fixed this issue while keeping the flow of the sentence.
There probably should have been a new paragraph here, to make clear it was Alara speaking again.
Should be “She raised her saber”.
These are two separate sentences, so the first should end with a full-stop—She ignited her saber and quickly hopped up on the log. “Shadow! They did this to us!
This post sets up the two combatants’ relationship, emotional state and motive for conflict very well, right from the very first paragraph. Apart from a shove, however, it feels like the main action is still waiting to happen. If you can, don’t leave it to the second post to initiate combat.