Rhylance stared at the writhing Zabrak with calculating eyes. As the poison ravaged the Inquisitor’s mind, he flailed out slashing the air with his clawed gauntlet. Kul’tak was yelling out in pain, and seemed to call out a name in his fit. Rhylance heard the growling of the nearby Vornskr. Dropping his scalpel to the ground, the medic placed his hand on the holster of his blaster.
The Vornskr readied to pounce and kill its prey, and as it leapt, Rhylance pulled out his Relby-K23, firing the silenced blaster before ducking out of the way as his glasses slipped off and clamored to the floor. The stunning blast erupted into the Vornskr’s chest, and the beast collided with the stone floor, one of his claws just missing Rhylance's right arm. The downed animal rolled to a halt. The Chiss walked to the beast’s downed body and fired two more shots at its torso.
“Stay.” He said in jest as he collected his non prescription lenses and placed them back onto his head. “You’re lucky I don’t actually need these.”
Rhylance adjusted his glasses, before re-holstering his blaster. The Major walked over to pick up the dropped scalpel and placed it back into his coat, he then took out a second scalpel.
The sounds of the tormented Inquisitor drew the Taldryanite’s attention. The Chiss watched his hunter flailing about, and when the Zabrak was positioned away from him, Rhylance slashed the scalpel across Kul’tak’s right shoulder blade, infusing a paralytic Type II poison into his blood stream. He stepped back and watched the poison do it's work.
“Two Hearts,” Rhylance thought to himself as he watched the Zabrak begin to stiffen before falling to the ground, “Your blood pumps faster. Good for helping my poison spread through you body. Bad for you.”
The Chiss began to examine the downed body of the Zabrak Sith. Kul’tak could only be still as the hallucinogenic riddled his mind with images, and pain. He was trapped. Trapped in his body, and he couldn’t focus. He tried to fight back against the poison. The intensity of the images strained his mental strength to such a degree that he thought he would break.
Rhylance took out a datapad and as he examined Kul’tak he recorded his findings. He shined a small light into the Knight’s eyes. ”Dilation is severe.” The Major took a small rag and wiped off the glistening Inquisitor's face. ”Excessive perspiration, intriguing.” Finally Rhylance took out a small metal device and held it to the Zabrak’s chest. He listened to the Sith’s hearts beat, focusing on the rhythmic beating that drowned out the agonizing cries emanating from Kul’tak. After a few seconds he smiled and stood up, typing in his final thoughts.
”Both of his hearts are beating at a significantly increased rate. The hallucinogen is causing the subject extreme mental, and physical duress.”
Rhylance put his datapad away and looked through his medical equipment for an antidote for the Type I hallucinogen. Grabbing the syringe, Rhylance injected the contents into Kul’tak’s right hip, and watched as the Sith’s eyes returned to normal.
Kul’tak felt his hearts slow down as his blood pumped the antitoxin throughout his system. The hallucinations that plagued his mind lost their vividness and intensity, and the Sith’s adrenaline levels dropped in rapid response to the curing effects of the drug. Though the Inquisitor could feel his sanity returning to him, he also realized that while he felt the paralytic effects slowly fading, he still felt trapped. He still couldn’t move his arms or legs, though his mouth seemed to lose the stiffness it had held. As the Zabrak trained his eyes on the blue skinned medic, he seethed in anger, before collecting his thoughts.
”Just wait, Kul’tak. Wait for the perfect moment to strike. He will let his guard down.”
The Zabrak began to concentrate and channel the Force into his body. He needed to calm his whole form down to allow the poison to wear off faster. He watched as the Chiss knelt down next to him.
“How are you feeling?” The blue skinned medic asked.
“What?” Kul'tak couldn't believe what he was hearing.
“How are you feeling? What was your experience like? I’d like to know how you felt as your mind was torn apart by my concoction.” The medic spoke as if the poison was his child.
“Are you insane?”
“That’s up for debate. I do however need you to speak, and if you don’t, well...I have my ways of making you talk.”
The Chiss pulled out a dagger. The blade looked to be sharpened to the Zabrak’s eyes. Kul'tak could feel the fear overwhelmingly taking over. He had never witnessed this sort of insanity.
“Why do you care?” Kul’tak asked, buying his time as he felt feeling return to his fingers.
The Major grinned at the question and removed his glasses, his red eyes burning into the inquisitor’s gaze.
“I created the hallucinogenic poison by mixing spores that I found on a mushroom from Felucia, and enzymes from the venom of a Kodashi Viper,” Rhylance said with a boastful tone. “This was a first test of how viable the Solution would be. And I must say I am happy with the results I saw. Now, I need to know how you felt, what you saw. Tell me, now.”
A crazed look overcame the Chiss’s face as he explained his creation to the Inquisitor. Kul’tak now understood why the Taldryan needed to die. He was too dangerous to be left to his devices.
“You really are insane. I can’t wait to be the “Claw” that takes you out for my Inquisition.” Kul’tak could feel his toes wiggle. He was nearing a point where a counterattack would be possible. “The deplorable things you do, they make those like me look tame,” he spat.
Rhylance smiled as he placed the glasses back on his face. He ran a hand through his slicked back hair before leaning forward to taunt his foe.
“Science, my friend, needs to progress. Progress requires experimentation,” the Taldryanite said in an impassioned inflection. Rhylance brought the dagger up to the Inquisitor’s chest. “And now, I finally get to experiment on a Zabrak Force wielder. Unfortunately for you, only one of us will survive this day. You tried to keep me from reaching my goal. The knowledge that is stored in these halls is far more valuable than your insignificant life. Be happy though, that your death may contribute to my success.”
Kul’tak felt the painful piercing of his skin as Rhylance applied pressure with the dagger, and acted. He channeled the anger he had been suppressing and the fear that Rhylance instilled, and the air above the palm of his hand crackled as pulsing electric energy burst forth and collided with the Chiss. Rhylance felt excruciating pain flow through his body as he was thrown backwards from Kul’tak and collided with a nearby wall. His body smoked as he toppled to the floor below.
Kul’tak, the effects of the paralytic still leaving his stiff body, managed to stand himself up, and grab his lightsaber hilt. His gaze bored into the downed mark. Pressing the switch on his saber hilt, a red beam hissed to life and hummed in the dead air of Dread Fortress.
Syntax
The second sentence here is actually a fragment. These should be joined by a conjunction and made into one sentence.
"A pair of bespectacled"
Story
You did an excellent job introducing the character conflict and including some action which is precisely what a first post should do. You depicted your opponent's character exceptionally well and found a way to make combat between a Force user and NFU relatively even which increased the dramatic tension. The post could have used some more specificity on what both parties were after besides the nebulous concept of "ancient knowledge."
The passage of ancient Sith poetry was a creative and refreshing addition. Little touches like this really set a great post apart from good ones.
Realism
Good use of the "Science over gods" aspect.
It's not clear that Rylance is translating the ancient Sith writing using the datapad or just copying it. As written it seems like he's reading the passage without assistance and Rylance doesn't read/speak ancient Sith.