Kordath yelped as he lost his grip. Twisting and flailing as he fell, he felt a hand get purchase on something warm and tightened his grip reflexively. A tearing sound could be heard as his descent continued, as well as an indignant cry from above as he hit the platform below on all fours, tail flicking in annoyance as the impact made his entire body shake. He praised himself on his natural nimbleness for avoiding landing on his head, and glanced down to see what was in his hand before his ears began to burn. A glance up confirmed his suspicions — a stretch of red skin was exposed by what he’d snagged on his fall.
Do I run again? Do I wait? Oh kark, she’s gonna bleedin’ kill me whoever she is!
Indecision cost him precious seconds as the Zeltron above slid down the tree trunk, curses trailing out of her mouth. She landed with admirable grace before rounding on him with a fist raised, only to find him holding one hand out before him. His other was shielding his face. The blue haired woman opened and closed her mouth several times as she stared at the bit of torn cloth in the hand in front of her.
“I know ya saw me pilferin’ a bit, lass, but I swear on me mum that this bit was an accident. Though ta be fair, it was yer fault, yankin’ a man’s bleedin’ tail like yer ringin’ a bloody bell!”
She snatched the cloth from his hand and tried to determine how to wrap it in a way to cover her mishap. Her frustration became more evident when she realized it wasn’t long enough to actually fix the problem.
“Dirty, rotten thieving…” she grumbled as she worked.
“Oi! You did this yerself, luv, I was just havin’ a bit of a stroll—”
She glared at him anew, cutting him off with a look. “You were stealing from those people!”
“Well ta be fair it wasn’t much, and not more than a bit from each one; ya gotta have a code afterall.”
“That doesn’t change the fact that I’m taking you back to those Wookiees so you can answer for your crime!” she declared, loud and firm.
If not for her being one of the red-skinned devils — Kordath had a bad string of luck when it came to them — he’d have found the entire display enticing. The last Zeltron he’d dealt with had wrapped him around her finger for months, using him against his Clan and forcing him to do things he still regretted. Before that had been one that had beaten him, nailed his tail to a table and used his identity to infiltrate Arcona in an attempt to kill the now-Shadow Lady. He had a distinct distrust for the pheromone-spewing red skins at this point. Which was a shame, because she was quite fit, as he’d noticed when she was coming down the tree with half her arse hanging out.
“Right, yer gonna march me up ta tha Wooks, past their playin’ kids and tha like, and turn me over?”
She reached to her belt and produced a set of stun cuffs with a look of determination. “That’s right. Quietly, or otherwise, up to you.”
Kordath nodded, gray eyes lit with mischief. “Aye, yer gonna do all that with yer red cheeks stickin’ out of yer trousers. Not that I’m complain’, I’ll follow ya nice and quiet if ya want, long as that’s goin’ on.”
He watched as she seemed to quiver in indignation, laughing inside his own head as he held both hands up in a placating manner.
“I’ll do ya a solid, seein’ as I did, uhh, tear tha pants and all,” he said, shrugging out of his coat and holding it out. “Wrap that about yerself, I know you Zeltrons like paradin’ about in tha tight clothes and all that nonsense, but at least make yerself decent, eh?”
“That...is surprisingly honorable of you. I’ll be certain to let the local authority know you came without a fight and even assisted your captor in her time of, um, trouble,” she spoke, seemingly uncertain if she believed her own words. Stowing the cuffs, she began to wrap the jacket’s sleeves around her waist, the leather material not being the most cooperative of things for such a task. Distracted by this, she failed to see the Ryn slip a hand behind his back and retrieve something. She did notice as she pulled the sleeves tight that he’d began to run across the platform, and that the scrap of her pants was gone.
“A trophy? Really you little—” she looked down to see a small black cylinder skipping across the wood, having been tossed over his shoulder as he ran. It exploded with a bright flash and loud popping sound, filling her ears. An arm thrown across her eyes saved most of her vision, though the ringing that resounded in her head was throwing her off balance. Despite that she glared daggers at the running Ryn, drawing and throwing a knife at him as he fled. The blade tucked itself in a tree trunk as he rounded it and she saw him come out the other side, jumping from the edge of the platform towards one further down, hitting it with a roll.
Kordath Bleu glanced back up at the very angry Zeltron and gave her a cocky wave.
He’d had a moment of panic when he hit the platform despite his confident attitude. His chosen path was taking him further from the village proper and into parts that seemed abandoned. A bit of wood had creaked in an alarming manner when he landed, making him think he knew why this area was vacant. Still, he decided, it was better than getting cuffed and dragged off to face Wookiee justice. He liked his arms where they were.
Trusting that the Force would warn him of a misstep, the Ryn took off at a trot, watching for branches that could be used as paths or vines that looked trustworthy to get him further from the Zeltron hunting him. She’d not even given him a name, not that he’d shared his own. Still, he grinned as he stuck a hand in his pocket to touch the clothing he’d torn from her. At least with that he could determine how far she was. Ducking behind an old Wookiee home built into the side of one of the massive tree trunks to catch his breath, he focused on the fabric.
That ain’t right, she’s gettin’ closer? I mean, she caught up with me once already, yeah, but how’s she bleedin’ trackin’ me through tha forest? Even bein’ able to feel me through tha Force ain’t enough for her ta stay on me trail this...well…
His mental process caused him to lean back and smack his head into the wall behind him.
“She can bloody track tha same as me, can’t she? And I gave her my blasted coat. Good coat, wear it all tha time, probably lead her right ta me. Grand. So much for runnin’ away,” he muttered aloud with a sigh.
Syntax
You repeat the word "quick"
The comma after tentatively should be a semicolon or a period.
Story
You did an excellent job painting the picture of the scene in the reader's mind. The venue felt dynamic and alive in your post. The conflict you introduced was a somewhat clever play on Blade's justice aspect and the classic thieving Ryn trope. The biggest part of your post you could improve on was more of Kordath besides him running and basically being too meek. I feel like you underplayed Kord a bit, especially his resourcefulness and that left an otherwise solid opening feeling a bit too one-sided.