Pain racked the Captain's left arm, and her precious rifle was now unusable for at least the rest of this fight, but the E-11 wasn't the worst back-up. Given the fact that it was the weapon her father used during her childhood she was quite familiar with it. As the Zabrak fled after his surprise assault, he was swiftly followed by a volley of blaster bolts, all tightly grouped and narrowly missing their mark. Frustrated that she had allowed her opponent to get by her defences, she needed the plan to counter his use of the Force. Lightning wasn't effective at the range between them. He could attempt to close the gap once more, but that would leave him open to attack, and since the defence wasn't his strong suit, it wouldn't benefit him to do so.
Kadrol was seething with the fact that one of his weapons was taken from him, though if he had got to within melee distance before, surely he could do it again. The only question would be how he couldn't just charge head on; he would be unprotected for too long. If only he could make himself quicker somehow. That was it the Zabrak thought, augment his speed to close the distance quicker and then take advantage of the lack of preparedness of his foe to beat her. All he had to do was seize the moment, yet that would prove difficult, Blair was much more understanding of how the weapon she had stolen worked when it comes to overheating. She would fire a few bursts then drop it into the snow for a second or two to keep the weapon cool. As a result, she wouldn't have much of a break in her onslaught.
Blair knew that the Sith would be looking to close the gap between them, it as the obvious thing to do, all she had to do was counteract that and ensure a healthy distance remain among them. As long as she could control that, the Kiffar would be in control of the fight and ultimately, the result. Making sure to keep her fire as close to the Zabrak as possible to restrict any opportunities for movement. Her plan was working, the gap was maintained and Hauen unable to move through the sea of bolts flying through the air towards him. Pinned down behind cover, the Zabrak was wondering how long it would last as it seemed to be capable of going on forever.
Sensing an opportunity was soon to be at hand, Kadrol prepared to make his move. It was a little too all or nothing for his liking, but he was seemingly out of options. He had never felt quite so alive; the danger was clear, but the potential reward was surely worth it. Noticing a longer than usual gap in the fire, he took the opportunity to emerge from cover. Kadrol moved with unnatural speed, closing the gap by a few meters, the extra speed proved useful when he heard an explosion go off behind him. Blair had thrown a grenade at the spot where he had been and was waiting for it to explode. Her plan is foiled, now was the chance to defeat her.
Blair couldn't focus on the failure of her grenade to end the contest for anything longer than a brief moment. Her opponent was too close for comfort; the soldier began to fire once more, hoping to re-establish the gap that had proved so unproductive for the Sith before. To her surprise, some of her shots were being blocked, almost as if the Acolyte possessed some unnatural ability to see her bolts before they came. Maybe taking his eyesight away would help the gap reform, Blair dropped a smoke bomb, on a five-second timer. The smoke filled the area immediately surrounding the Zabrak and allowed Blair to scurry swiftly away from her opposition. Kadrol’s figure emerged from the smoke with speed, having decided that to stand in smoke was no way to finish the fight. His boots had given him the grip necessary not to end up face first on the floor.
Advancing with intent, the Sith moved to deliver a killing blow. Having seen this, the Loyalist jumped forwards and kicked the Zabrak hard on his left knee. The impact was enough to send Hauen’s lightsaber out of his hand and into the snow, as well as dropping him to a knee. Blair fought the pain; she couldn't afford to let it stop her from winning. She took the rifle and smashed it, with as much strength as she could, into the face of her foe. He fell to the ground, allowing Blair, who had maintained control of the rifle, to move out of the way of the falling body and press the barrel into the back of her opponent’s neck. The Zabrak was in no mood to fight, he had been bested, but he would one day be strong enough to avenge his loss.
Be mindful of your transitions. You've now jumped point of views from character to character. It's a bit jarring. You can use a line break, but otherwise just be mindful of how you transition POVs.
Always capitalize the Force.
Awkward wording here.
an intense
rifle rifle. try and vary word usage, it will help create better flow for the reader.
even if this was a tripple elipses, it wouldn't work.
Realism: Kadrol is Always Preppared and a Duelist. He has +3 in Blasters, so I think he would know how NOT to overheat his Blaster in this situation.