Rasilvenaira circled warily, the double-bladed dagger resting easily in her hand, ready and waiting. She watched the Aedile and as the girl burst into motion with her charge. The Battlelord dove to the side and tucked into a controlled roll before shifting into a low crouch. A small smile flickered across the Sith's lips as she let herself sink deep into the tide of the Force as it ebbed and flowed around them. Her mind tugged at a fist sized piece of rubble two yards behind and to the left of the Mystic, causing it to scrape and thump against the stone ground. Rasilvenaira twisted the Force around that piece of rubble, letting it briefly wear the guise of something far more dangerous- one of the venomous snakes common to the area.
Alara spared a quick glance at the sound, the the half-Sephi's eyes widened and she growled under her breath as she turned to strike out at the serpent. The rage that fueled her, drove her, also for that split instant clouded her mind and blinded her to the truth. Too late that realization came as the illusion faded. Alara felt the Battlelord's double-bladed dagger rake across her back from the right shoulder to the left hip. The Aedile cried out in pain and fury as she whirled back to face Rasilvenaira.
The Sith had moved swiftly out of arm's reach of the now furious half-Sephi after delivering the slash to her exposed back. The older woman grinned- a cold, malicious grin. Rasilvenaira was toying with her opponent. She rarely entered combat by choice without having some knowledge of the person she planned to fight. The young Aedile's berserker tendencies would become her ultimate undoing as the Battlelord played with her opponent.
“Never turn your back on a predator, child.” The Battlelord's strangely calm voice taunted the younger woman with the lesson.
The Mystic narrowed her eyes and lunged at the Sith, seeking to get her hands on Rasilvenaira, to crush her. Her right hand closed on the Battlelord's left upper arm as the woman started to move sideways and yanked hard, attempting to pull the Sith off her feet. Rasilvenaira hit the ground hard, giving a low grunt of pain before she quickly flipped back up to her feet, and aimed a kick at the Aedile's forward leg just above the knee. The Sith pressed her attack and struck out again with the double-bladed dagger, seeking to cut across the half-Sephi's midsection as the girl closed in on her.
Alara clenched her jaw, and twisted to avoid the blade's strike. She retaliated with a vicious punch aimed for the Battlelord's face. She was determined to keep the tide of battle in her favor and refused to let up on the Sith. The Mystic reached a foot out, hooking Rasilvenaira's leg and knocking her off balance. Rasilvenaira growled as she landed hard on the ground again and the dagger was knocked from her grasp. Alara forced the older woman to defend herself against the flurry of enraged blows that rained down on her as the Aedile sought to pummel her into the ancient stone beneath them.
Rasilvenaira fended off the blows, though many hit home. She reached out one hand, her dark eyes having spotted her double-bladed dagger. Focusing all her will on the blade she called it back to her. As Alara's hands closed around Rasilvenaira's throat the older Sith's hand closed around the hilt of her weapon and she bared her teeth in a feral grin as she plunged the blade deep into the Aedile's chest before kicking the half-Sephi off her. The Battlelord regained her feet, wincing and somewhat shaken from the beating but her dark eyes still held a fierce defiance.
“Consider your lesson learned, if you survive.” Rasilvenaira turned and slowly began to leave the arena.
Story
Mkay. Then what? I’m not marking this as a detractor, but from a stylistic standpoint, I would try to shy away from such clipped sentences as the start to your posts; especially when your title/name alone accounts for the majority of words/syllables.
Aye, totally unassuming… except for the whole, y’know, standing in the middle of an otherwise abandoned Massassi arena. That doesn’t stand out at all.
This, and a good chunk of the paragraph, is completely unnecessary. It goes over information that is not important to the match and should already be available on your CS in the physical description.
Synopsis
On the technical level, this was a great post, if rather short. Beyond that, there is a rather distinct lack of story given to the reader: why are the characters at this arena, who challenged who, and are they really fighting as some form of test? Leaving a bit of mystique is fine, but this post was flagrantly drab. Furthermore, it lacked any conflict between the characters, which is a baseline requirement for the ACC; even for the Funderdome.