Heated by the exchange, both combatants welcomed the caress of cool mist that a gust of wind brought over the high platform. Dolash didn’t let on though, his muscles tensed and his eyes fixed. His pose, silhouetted against the roaring white-foaming mass of water cascading behind him, was that of energy immobilised, waiting for its release.
Even so, the platform wasn’t exactly what you’d call a field of battle. It girded one of the city’s huge domes, right at the edge of the settlement. On it rested several of the natives’ streamlined watercraft, evidently grounded for repair, and close to the rim stood a stack of canisters marked “THEED CRYOFLUID SOLUTIONS, Superconduct Coolant” in Aurebesh letters.
This is no good. If Korroth had hoped that allowing the Twi’lek to take the initiative would make the stranger reveal his intentions, the ploy hadn’t worked so far. The Jedi was reluctant to impel another escalation of violence, but he had his Omwati charges to protect. It surely wasn’t a coincidence that this Force adept had appeared, here of all places, now of all times. He would have to change his tack.
The saberists moved simultaneously. Korroth lunged straight ahead, making full use of his speed and reach. The opposing saber, driven by the Twi’lek’s bursting Force-fuelled release of muscle tension, redirected downwards from its high attack with startling ease. It bounced off the green blade and smacked away the Jedi’s second and third attacks with an instinctive speed that belied an expert fluidity of execution between mind, body and movement. Even the stranger’s mind, Korroth observed as he sidestepped back out of range, had slipped into a calmness of motion that bore as much of ingrained reflex as practised, deliberate technique.
“Strength,” the Odanite spoke, still en garde. “There are many kinds of it, stranger.”
Without waiting for a response, Korroth shot forward and struck low. Again, the Twi’lek’s turquoise blade descended and connected with the Jedi’s, parrying, blocking and deflecting as though the two weapons had gained a magnetic attraction that defied the Consular’s attempts to strike his opponent. Korroth pivoted around the Twi’lek, aiming towards his exposed side, but the stranger shifted back his foot, his blade now repositioned to intercept the attack with simple and efficient elegance.
“Yours, I think, is not the aggressor’s strength.” The Jedi had retreated to a safe distance. “But if it’s not aggression, what is it that brought you to Jan-gwa? What makes you think that being here will help you defend your friends?”
Dolash hesitated. This was not how he had planned things to go, talking over drawn sabers, and to this snotty Jedi to boot. But he couldn’t go back without a deal in hand, and it didn’t look like he could go on without facing the Pau’an’s lightsaber. Of one thing he was sure: by fair means or foul that green blade would go down. He just hoped words would fare better than sabers.
“I know why you challenged me,” the Guardian replied. “And we know why you’re here. Your Clan’s Undesirables safehouse in the city; we know its location and we haven’t released it to anyone else.” The lines on the Pau’an’s face tightened at this, and the tip of his blade rose ever so slightly. Dolash wondered if it had been a mistake to open like this. He certainly hadn’t meant it to sound like such a threat.
“I’m here because we have a common enemy,” he continued. “We want in on the fight, and we know that giving you our strength will make us both stronger.”
“Are you asking for some sort of alliance?”
“A collaboration. With your Clan, and with Lotus.”
The stranger’s words had not put Korroth at ease. Far from it. He ran through his head all the possible factions that could be seeking succour against Pravus, but each one was potentially worse than the one before. Already Odan-Urr had grown close to Clans that harboured Dark Siders. No matter how many warships a “collaboration” could bring to the transient fight against Pravus, Korroth knew accepting another darkening influence would only bring imbalance to the greater eternal war.
“Who is your lord, then? Whom do you speak for?”
“Bloodfyre,” the Tarenti replied.
I'm struggling a bit with your opening paragraph. It doesn't really set up the story well and I'm not sure how well it jives with Korrath's character.
When you're writing a battle with two characters of the same gender/race/etc., using non-specific pronouns can lead to confusion. Who seemed arrogant - Dolash or Korrath? Who surmised who was showing off?
I'm confused as to this. Your character is a Twi'lek per your CS.
Force* (it's a proper noun, so it needs to be capitalized)
deflecting*
I'm really confused as to what exactly Korrath's head is doing here. What do you mean by "moved his head independently of his body?"