All too quickly Tarvitz realised his mistake. As the flames billowed outwards towards his target, he felt the Force building up about Mendes, amplifying her already heightened agility. Boldly leaping over the jet of fire, she slammed headlong into the Jensaarai, one fist colliding with his face. Sent reeling by the blow, he crashed backwards onto the ground and released his grip on the flame-projector’s trigger. Mendes recovered first, and Tarvitz barely had time to raise his own weapon, blocking her lightsaber as it arced down towards his head.
“Nothing funny to say?” she asked through gritted teeth, pushing down and slowly edging the glowing blade towards his face.
Tarvitz answered with a knee to the gut, driving it into her side with a thud of plasteel striking muscle. She rolled with the blow, lessening the impact but losing her immediate advantage. Yet, by the time he rose to his feet she had already recovered, awaiting in a crouch with one hand stretched out before her.
“Throw it away,” Mendes said simply, eyes fixed upon his lightsaber. In almost any other situation this would have seemed ludicrous, the sort of overconfidence which would have led to an abrupt death. Yet, there was power to Mendes’ words and for a moment Tarvitz felt his grip slacken on the weapon, ready to accept that order.
“Now!” she continued, trying to press home her brief advantage. Yet, that moment had passed, and the sheer bloody minded determination that passed for Tarvitz’s mental defenses overrode it, blunting the assault even as it began.
“As you wish,” he answered brightly, promptly hurling the lightsaber like a spear towards the Dark Jedi. An obvious attack perhaps but as she was forced to deflect it away, sending the weapon spinning down the hillside, it brought Tarvitz precious seconds.
Something briefly glowed in the open palm of one hand as he called upon the energies of the Force, punching outwards palm-first. Mendes raised her guard, and the world promptly went white. Something exploded before her, cutting her off from the world outside and robbing Mendes of her sight. Stumbling backwards, she shook her head, trying to recover from the disorientating strike. A chance Tarvitz was hardly about to give her. In a single smooth movement, he dragged a trio of throwing daggers free from his belt and launched them into the air. Even blinded, Mendes managed to intercept the first of the projectiles, reducing it to lumpen glowing metal with a rapid deflection, only to be struck by the second two. The first punched through the shoulder of her sword arm, firmly lodging itself in place, while the second buried itself up to its hilt in her guts.
She seemed more surprised than truly hurt, and for a moment Mendes just stood there, a look of total astonishment written across her features. Then, with an electronic hiss of deactivation, the lightsaber fell from her hands. Dropping to her knees, she reached for her stomach with shuddering hands, staining them red as she clutched at the worst of the two wounds.
“Still expecting me to surrender?” she managed to sneer, defiance overriding the pain wracking her body.
“I would hope you would do the smart thing and yield,” Tarvitz answered, trying to make his sincerity clear, “Do that, and I have to fix you up, them keep you guarded on a long flight back to my Master. You will have every opportunity to betray me. Fail to do so and, well, your story ends here, and something tells me that dying of blood loss next to a ruin would be an ill conceived end to the saga of Kelly Mendes.”
“And then?” she asked, fighting back the blackness creeping in about the edges of her vision.
“That depends entirely upon what Master Vorsa has to say to you, and the answers you provide.”
Mendes did not answer for several precious moments, seemingly trying to rise to her feet. Then, her head slumped forwards and she fell heavily to one side, unconcious before she even struck the ground. Tarvitz decided to take that as a yes.
“Tarvitz to Drachen,” he said, opening up the small comlink fixed to his neck “The target’s down but badly wounded. Bring in the ship as fast as you can and prepare any medical facilities you have on that thing.”
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This is a really jarring POV jump. This is the start of the match, and it immediately made me slow down/try and figure out who's point of view I was being introduced to. I'm also shaky on the whole introduction here in terms of what is going on.
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I do really like how you worked in Kelly's costume-wardrobe.