“Still not good enough,” declared Keiji. “I intended to kill you.”
“I'm sure you did,” came the reply. Furios put on the front well, but in truth, his shoulder was in excruciating pain. The slug must have struck the brachial nerve because through the throbbing in his shoulder, the arm itself was going numb. Mistakes were definitely made. He hadn't had enough time to create a complete barrier and his shoulder had paid the price. If he was being honest with himself, it must have been the will of the Force that he'd erected any kind of a defense at all and that there weren't a few fresh holes in his chest. Maybe this fight deserved a little caution after all. The Epicanthix raised his saber, stepping forward to hide the true severity of his wound.
“Do you have any last words, merc?” he asked confidently.
“How’s your other fight going?”
“Excuse me?”
“The other fight, are you winning?”
“Haven’t had another chance to check,” the Plagueian explained casually.
“Go ahead,” cajoled the Odanite. “I’ll wait.” He needed time to think of an escape.
The Battlelord narrowed his eyes, trying to discern the ploy. “Weapons on the ground?” The saber hissed shut, withdrawing the plasma back into its hilt. He held his weapon out to the side, emphasising his intent.
“Have it your way,” the mercenary placated.
The weapons clicked against the stone floor as the two equites rose back up to face each other. Morega reached with his right for the scanner, flashing red and yellow light. Downloading files… 87% complete.
“Are you at least winning something today?” mocked Keiji as the scanner returned to its pouch.
The Battlelord masked his content at the progress the device was making. There never was a function for the Sand Pit on the scanner, just the slicing program that was currently cleaning out the data tightly gripped in the mercenary’s hand. Soon enough he’d have all the files intact. The merc could keep the datapad.
“Actually, I’m out five thousand credits,” Furios lied with a shrug. The credits weren’t really gone so it couldn’t really bother him, therefore dismissing the losses was easy. Fortunately, Keiji was desperate and so he saw the lie as an opportunity rather than fiction.
“Why don’t we make a deal?” he asked, instantly seeming more accommodating.
“What kind of deal?” the Epicanthix replied returning his saber to his hip. Negotiations would drain the clock easily.
“Well I want to live,” explained the Togruta, holstering Ebony. “And you don’t want to accept any gambling losses. I’ll give you five thousand credits to let me walk away?”
The Plagueian pretended to ponder the offer, seeing a way to make some money and still get what he came for. “As a gambler, if I don’t lose, then I win. Make it ten thousand.”
“Are you crazy?!” he shouted. “That’s a whole new ship!”
“Do you want to live or not?” He unclipped his saber, activating it for emphasis.
“I do! Ten thousand is… acceptable gambling losses,” he said laughing nervously.
“Make the transfer and I’ll see you to the door.”
They each flipped open their Comlinks, moving credits through the Holonet. They each snapped closed. Keiji hooked his prize to his belt and carefully walked to the door, the blue saber trained on him. As he neared the exit, a thought struck him and he turned to look back. “Night? The pieces?” They clattered along the stone floor with a shove of Furios’ boot. Their owner picked them up and bolted, slamming the door shut behind him. Furios immediately pulled out the scanner. It was only 98% done. He followed the signal to the front door, watching the last files save. Keiji was gone.
Download complete… Initiate power cell overload? Y/N
“Oh? Don’t mind if I do.” he mused with a confirming tap. For a moment, there was no sound but the wind. Then a bang and a low rumble. Furios grinned, following the noise. As he approached the top of a nearby hill he could see the smoking body of Keiji Suoh crawling up the next slope. Furios casually strode to his defenseless prey. The Odanite had lost his leg and hip where the datapad had rested. His hand was gone too, likely lost as he tried to pry the bomb off.
“Bad odds, I’m afraid,” mocked Furios, impaling the Togruta with a grin.
...and although they currently were empty...
Also, using "you" here throws off third person omniscient storytelling.
"it was placed there."- same thing as above.
Comma needed after "you know" for attributing action/emphasis to the dialogue being spoken.