Panic ensued throughout the crowd as the Miriluka’s emerald blade hissed to life. Revs stood in front of the man who had just challenged him, the tip of his lightsaber pointed at the ground in front of him. Yvanos kept his hands resting lightly on the hilts of his of the lightsabers hanging from his waist. He appeared relaxed, seeming to pay no attention to the panicking crowd fleeing the area. He kept his gaze locked on where the Knight's eyes should have been.
“Now, I am going to give you one last chance. Tell me why you are here and I will let you walk away. No need to let things get ugly,” the Equitie murmured from behind his cigar.
“Sithspit!” Revs snapped at the man before him. “If you had any intention of letting me walk away from here, then you would have never even bothered stopping to speak to me. You would have kept walking, minding your own business.”
Moving his left leg back behind him, and turning to extend his left arm back for balance, the young Force-user shifted into a fencer's stance. “No. You stopped me for no other reason than to fight. I'm sick of you Inquisitors hunting me,” Revs spat through gritted teeth. “Now, I don't have time for this, so forgive me if I end it quickly!”
Revs snapped the tip of his blade up, lunging forward as he thrust the emerald beam straight at his opponent's face. Yvanos' hands were a blur as his dual lightsabers sprang to life, the right parroting aside the fencer's thrust, moving in an upward arch and narrowly missing its targets head. The young Miraluka stumbled back in surprise from the close call. Not waiting to allow his opponent to regain his footing, Yvanos reached out through the Force, throwing a telekinetic blast and slamming the former Assassin into the wall behind him.
Revs dropped down to one knee as pain shot through his back, heart beating loudly in his ears, from the increased adrenaline pumping in his veins. “Now look, I am not with the Inquisitors. I don't actually want to kill you,” Yvanos explained after spitting what was left of his cigar out.
“You lie!” Revs screamed as he threw a telekinetic blast of his own toward the Equitie before him. Yvanos' head snapped back as if he had been punched in the mouth. He stumbled from the blow, recovering quickly. His eyes were filled with rage as he sprang into action, his dual blades swinging wildly at the Miraluka, who quickly rolled out of the way, coming to his feet and bringing up his lightsaber just in time to block the next attack.
Revs could hardly keep up with the series of cyclonic attacks his insistent opponent unleashed upon him, having to use the Force to amplify his speed to parry and dodge the onslaught. Ducking under a wide-arched slash coming from his right, Revs drew the stiletto from his belt, jamming it at his opponent's right forearm.
Yvanos' lightsabers clanged to the floor as he clutched at his wounded arm. Revs used the moment to evaluate his current situation. He was panting , and pain spread across his back from where he hit the wall with every breath. But his opponent's breathing was heavier. The Human seemed far more tired than he was. The young Knight realized he didn't have to overpower this man or be more skilled; he just needed to out last him, a feat that was made far easier now that, he hoped, the man couldn't hold two lightsabers.
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Syntax error. I think this was supposed to be one sentence conjoined?
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Two things here - first, if you're trying to communicate mentally you'll want to put that in italics to distinguish it from spoken dialogue. The other issue is you've got +1 telepathy on your CS. At +1, you have to maintain eye contact to send simple messages. I don't think there's eye contact kept here.
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This is kind of a minor quibble (well, most of these comments so far have been) but how would Yvanos know that Revs is a Shadow? There's the +3 perception, sure, but was Revs seen cloaking or moving into and out of shadows, changing disguises, etc.?
How does Yvanos know who Revs is (IC, obviously)? This happens again at the very end of this post.