Temporarily shielded by the towering grass, Legorii unslung his BlasTech A280 rifle. Grimacing, he glanced at the burnt, exposed flesh of his left shoulder.
“You’re a coward,” he called to Len. Crouching in the grasses, he knew that Len was less than two dozen meters away. He could feel him nearby. “I had no idea how far Turel’s standards had fallen.”
The Chiss made no response, so Legorii tried again. “I’ll teach you how to use a blaster, you blue bastard.” He fired a few shots in the direction that Len had last been. The heavy bolts cut a swath of the grass.
Legorii hated fighting mundane military men like Len Iode. They were boring. They were beneath him. Nothing resembling a challenge ever came out of these fights. Once, he’d been given dignified assignments. He was one of the most powerful leaders in the most powerful Clan. But he scarcely recognized Arcona now. He busied himself with tasks like this one, traveling to remote and dangerous planets as a sort of investigator-at-large. The truth was, nobody really knew for sure what was happening. Something dynamic, in all likelihood.
Another blaster bolt blitzed past him. If he didn’t know better, he’d have guessed that Len’s aim was improving. Refocusing, Legorii began to stalk his prey with a practiced efficiency not dissimilar to that of the akul. His crimson eyes searched for the blue-hued skin. Len’s protruding stomach would be a dead giveaway. As seconds stretched into minutes, the Arconan began to wonder whether another of Shili’s hunters would find the man first.
Then Len burst forth. His blaster pistol began spraying bolts indiscriminately. Legorii dove at the man’s feet. Anzati and Chiss limbs collided. The Arconan drove his shoulder hard in his opponent’s shin, sending both tumbling to the dirt. To Legorii’s ire, the air was forced from his lungs as the stocky Chiss landed on top of him.
For a moment, they wrestled in the dirt. Len’s vibrodagger was still in his off-hand, and he stabbed clumsily with it. Legorii kept the blade at bay with ease. He dropped his rifle and grabbed Len’s wrist. The Dark Side frothed within him, lending an iron quality to his grip. Breathing heavily from the exertion, the Anzat managed to free the dagger from his opponent’s hand. Len attempted to swing his pistol around and into Legorii’s gut, but the latter managed to deflect the barrel of the weapon with his forearm.
Snatching Len’s fallen vibrodagger from the dirt, Legorii pressed its point against his opponent’s throat. The rotund Chiss froze. A grin spread across the Anzat’s features.
“Drop the blaster,” he ordered. After a brief moment’s hesitation, Len complied. The two men locked stares.
Again, the Arconan spoke. “I hate fighting you people. It’s never a challenge, but there’s no reward. No upside. I’d drink your soup, but it’s bland.” He seemed to be musing aloud, entirely unconcerned with whether Len was listening or not. Legorii heaved an exaggerated sigh. “Well, I do like to make these executions theatrical. Any, uh...what’s that they say? Last words?”
Len Iode, defiant to the end, glared fiercely at him. “In Odan-Urr, we know honor. That word means nothing to you, Arconan.” He spat the last word like a curse.
Legorii barked a short laugh. “Honor? Your Consul knows nothing of honor. But if there’s honor in dying by your own blade in the blood-soaked dirt of Shili, of no use to anyone, then so be it. Die.” He slashed Len’s throat with the vibrodagger, opening his trachea and exposing it to the sky.
A light wind rustled the grass as Legorii stood and left Len Iode’s corpse for the scavengers.
Syntax
Unnecessary repetition of "grass" that doesn't enhance the story.
Need a comma after the introductory phrase.
I believe the edit above is the missing word, but even if you meant something else it was missed.
Missed a comma and I propose using a colon here instead. You also repeated "the creature".
Repetition of "tall".
Typo and missing comma here.
More repetition.
Story
How did Len know Legorii? There isn't any Feat for "you may have heard of me" in play, so you shouldn't leave it up to a guess. Inform us through the story how he knows this specific individual.
You made a good attempt at meeting the pacing of action needed for a match with the limitations imposed by this event. Still, you could have done more to depict the characters. You played well into Len's ability to dispel an illusion, but didn't offer the same care to your opponent. To put it bluntly, according to his sheet, Legorii has a flair for the dramatic. You missed an opportunity to really enhance the story by playing this up in the short dialogue before the fight gets back going.