Qyreia looked back again, only to see nothing but the thin vapors of swirling green mist amidst the trees tinted red by the ambient light. Normally she would have paused to examine the situation, but given how easily she had broken his earlier attack, she figured the safest course was in leaning on her physical attributes. Besides, she knew better than to lead him directly to her ship. That would be too easy, she thought, angling her route just enough that they would run parallel to the landing site but outside visual range.
Further back, the human half-breed was watching his newfound quarry warily, though his attention was somewhat split. The Zeltron wasn’t necessarily faster, but she was holding her pace better than Mune, and he had to call on the Force to bolster his frame and close the distance before he ran out of proverbial juice.
Cease running, assassin. You will only die tired.
If the mercenary hadn’t known that she was facing a Force user, the sudden mental invasion might have scared her into faltering.
“Get out of my head, choob-licker.”
“If you insist,” came the too-calm reply as the pale human dropped from the forest canopy directly in her path.
Should’ve seen that coming. Her rifle swung around to fire only to be caught by Mune’s vibrosword, the red plasma searing the air just shy of his waist. Then she saw the flash of purple light arc toward her. Sithspit! Leveraging the rifle, she threw the metal blade over her head and dipped to the side, just narrowly avoiding the lightsaber. Qyreia was about to bring the buttstock into the Force user’s rib cage, but was as he tried to trip her behind her heel. She responded by grabbing the collar of his black clothes to catch herself before stomping on the guilty foot.
There would have been a knee to his gut if not for the elbow to her face. It wasn’t enough to really hurt, but the bundle of nerves he struck stung fiercely. It also put her off balance; enough that he could bring his weapons around to strike once again.
Qyreia barely caught the vibrosword with her rifle, but the lightsaber seared through her jacket and left a painful but shallow slash across a shoulder blade. She wanted to scream. Some part of her brain shut out the impulse, reducing it to a gasp as she tumbled away, turning onto her back to fire a burst at the swordsman. One round went wide and another was deftly swatted aside by the violet beam, but the short range offered enough of a handicap that Mune’s thigh felt the harsh burn of a third shot.
“Suck it, schutt-ack!”
Mune’s hand flung outward and Qyreia felt as though a boulder had slammed into her gut. The force of the invisible strike sent her flying from the ground and into a nearby tree, where she fell in a slump on the ground. She was fairly certain, as she tried to recover, that several ribs were cracked or broken.
Weary and gasping for air, she was reaching for the rifle that was only an arm’s length away when she felt herself lifted from the damp soil and pulled through the thin mist into the arms of the hybrid. The vibroblade hummed in the hand that pinned her trigger hand away from her pistol, while the lightsaber glittered just within view.
“Now is the time for your last words, assassin.”
The Zeltron swallowed back her racing thoughts, bringing a hand down to the seam of the Force user’s trousers.
“Your bodily pleasures won’t save yo-eow!”
Qyreia’s hand was like a vice as she grasped between his legs, narrowly winning the dangerous gamble as she twisted the grip viciously. Mune’s hold on her was gone, his face contorted into an expression of grotesquely pained shock. Wasting no time, she tore away, drawing her blaster while the whir of the saber sun just behind her head. Two deep thrums of her pistol brought silence to the air save for their labored breaths.
“I’d feel bad,” she said through grit teeth to the badly-wounded Mune, “but I gave you the easy option.” Qyreia keyed her commlink. “Remee, prep the medical supplies and get the ship ready to go.” She looked cautiously at the dilapidated Dark Jedi. “Our guest can find his own ride home.”
This is a general comment - I'm not going to note every instance in this post - but you have far too many unnecessary commas.
I'm struggling a bit with Q's actions here. There are two separate aspects on her CS that note she's not going to be outright confrontational. Having her try to snipe Mune and then later mention she's going to kill him doesn't strike me as very true to her character.