Rhylance’s eyes widened after hearing Odan Urr’s name. He considered all the trouble Odan-Urr had gone through to save Taldryan from certain destruction at Karufr, and the alliance their two clans now shared. This mercenary had just violated their non-hostility agreement. The Chiss knew he could spin this to his advantage.
“And how do you think Turel will feel about this encounter?” he asked with a slight smirk.
“Lord Chancellor has more to worry about than the removal of a potential threat. War is coming.”
“He may dislike it when he discovers that the Consul you killed was the Consul of Clan Taldryan,” Rhylance said, closing his eyes and waving his hand to the side nonchalantly. “But then again, perhaps you are not privy to sensitive information. I mean, you did attack me unprovoked. I’m not sure your ’Lord Chancellor’ will be too thrilled about that.”
Keiji froze at Rhylance's words. He looked over his enemy and noticed the insignia that lay upon the Chiss’ left pectoral. It was the red, blue and purple icon of Taldryan. The way the Chiss held himself gave off an authoritative luster. If it was true and the medic was the Consul, Turel would be quite angry indeed.
“Let’s say I believe you, then what?” Keiji asked the supposed Consul.
“We both go about our business, and when we’ve finished, we go have a conversation with Turel. Our alliance must be fully insured,” the medic answered. He placed his blaster back in its holster, his red eyes never breaking away from his opponent’s visor. The key here, Rhylance knew, was to be calm and show no signs of faltering or malicious intent. He needed to be ”honest”.
Keiji scanned the Consul’s face, looking for heightened emotions or signs of dishonesty. He found nothing. Slowly he re-sheathed his katana. He made a note to keep tabs on the Chiss, but at the moment he needed to finish scouring the ruins. Truthfully the Privateer thought his time, efforts, and abilities were being wasted on a mission like this. The sooner he finished here, the sooner he could be assigned a mission that mattered.
Rhylance watched as the Togruta turned and began to walk away. The mercenary was smart for agreeing with him. But he was also incredibly stupid. The Chiss was never one to forget the slights committed against him. He hadn’t let his own mother get away with her vile acts, and he would not make an exception for the Odanite.
Pulling out his blaster, the medic switched it to its stun setting and activated the silencer. He raised the firearm and pulled the trigger. Blue rings of energy silently cascaded forward and collided with Keiji’s back. Upon impact, the Togruta fell forward.
Rhylance sauntered forward to his downed opponent and knelt beside him. He pulled out a scalpel and placed it on the ground next to Keiji. The Chiss began working at removing the armor, starting with the sealed helmet. Once removed, the medic took in the peaceful sleeping visage of the Privateer.
He picked up the scalpel and made shallow cuts in the neck to begin the delivery of his paralysis poison. As he moderated the effects, Rhylance realized that the Togruta had little reaction. Obviously trained to ward itself against poisons, Keiji’s body was fighting back. With a sigh, the Chiss grabbed the blaster again and fired a few more rounds of stun energy into the downed mercenary.
. . .
“I’m going to keep you alive,” Rhylance said as he worked around Keiji’s body. Hours had passed since the initial encounter. As he waited for his transport to arrive, the medic passed the time by studying the fortress. “I have plans for you and Odan-Urr. But to start with them, I need Turel to believe that I’m truly working with him, stupid Jedi. The return of your recklessly damaged body that I saved from the fortress should do it.”
While Rhylance studied the Dread Fortress. the nearby body of Keiji began to stir. The Togruta felt the effects of his forced nap and shook his head. As he grunted and tried to stand back up, another series of blue rings hit him and he dropped again.
“Stay down and sleep a while. We’re not done yet.” The Consul said with a wicked grin, his eyes sparkling behind his spectacles.
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