Competition: [GJW XII Event Long] Combat Writing - Collective Strike

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[GJW XII Event Long] Combat Writing - Collective Strike

Prompt

Wars have always been fought on more than one front. The assault on Nancora was little different in that regard. Armed with both reliable and substantial intel, the Clans turned their attention to the Collective's base of operations, where the Technocratic Guild prospered as a mechanical juggernaut of manufacturing. As with any multi-faceted operation, there were sure to be battles within battles. And so it was that the Clans selected skilled individuals within their own ranks and tasked them with high priority targets.

However, just because a group of disparate elements such as within the Brotherhood are focused upon a common goal, does not mean they stand united. Glory, after all, cannot truly be shared. Nor can opportunities to rob an 'ally' of a key piece be ignored. As targets overlap between the Clans' representatives, allies will just as easily become part and parcel to targets themselves. This is war, and the battle lines are not always clear and are always shifting.

Possible Targets

Submissions and Grading

  • Write a fiction at least 500 words in length with no maximum, outlining a combat skirmish with one of the above targets.

  • Your story should be centered on your Main or Alternative character. Slotted NPCs, Wikipedia NPCs, or other characters that you create or invent to tell your story are not only allowed, but encouraged. However, your narrative should focus around either your Main or Alternative character.

  • A snapshot of your Main or Alternative character loadout must be selected and submitted with your entry.

  • Preferred submission format is pdf. Anything in a GoogleDoc must be exported as a pdf for submission.

  • Grading will be based on the Voice Fiction Rubric.


This competition is is in the Event Long Combat Writing Bin. Participating in a competition in this bin for the first time awards 4 points from participation to your unit. ACC Ladder and ACC Bracket are also in this bin. Participating in at least one competition in each Event Long bin will earn a bonus of 3 points (see details at the GJW XII Parent Competition).

This competition is worth a relatively low proportion of placement points for Event Long. Cumulatively, the placements in this competition are worth 7% of placement points in Event Long.

Competition Information
Parent Competition
Great Jedi War XII
Organized by
Darth Renatus, Lord Marick Tyris Arconae, Telaris "Mav" Cantor
Running time
2017-10-14 until 2017-11-20 (about 1 month)
Target Unit
Entire DJB
Competition Type
Fiction
Awards
Novae and Clusters of Ice as per VOICE guidelines
Participants
88 subscribers, of which 39 have participated.
Results
Member
Qyreia Arronen
File submission
Combat_Writing__QA14369.pdf
Placement
1st place
Member
Lord Dacien Victae
File submission
GJW_12_Collective_Strike_Entry.pdf
Placement
2nd place
Member
General Zentru'la
File submission
Fire_and_Smoke.pdf
Placement
3rd place
Member
Aedile Tali Sroka
File submission
Goodbye_Muunmen_(2).pdf
Textual submission

All the Moonmen want things their way
But we make sure they see the sun

Placement
4th place
Member
Lord Muz Ashen Keibatsu
File submission
3714-collectivestrike.txt
Textual submission

Muz rose slowly, drawing himself up to his full height, the sunset tones of his lightsaber blades retreating into their hilts with an electric slickness. The Huntresses lay around him, limbs strewn in a wild array, the handiwork of a few moments of the saberist's attention. The cold predatory eyes slid up, regarding the horizon, the blackened scarring of his eyes hiding what exactly, if anything, he was focusing on.

The wind tore through the valley, a rush of sand and rust particles sweeping across everything, flecking the Devaronian's black beard with bits that used to be important a hundred years ago. He grunted, raising his hand, the rocket screaming from the wrist launcher in a dismissive gesture. It spiraled toward his foe, a trail of smoke visible before the wind tore even that away.

The Lion tilted his head in confusion, the rocket exploding in front of him, the faint image of a violet tinged sphere appearing for a moment behind the flames. He stepped forward, pushing sabers into their holsters at his waist, a measured and steady gait as he moved toward the alien. It took a few moments before recognition bloomed in his eyes.

"Ashen." He said the name as if it were a malicious curse. The Devaronian bolted to the side, making his way toward an oversized pile of wreckage, the only sort of feature that the Badlands had to offer. Muz kept his pace, slowly walking toward him, as inevitable as death.

"I know you." he snarled, angling himself, worming his big frame through a narrow crevasse, backing himself up, trying to find a defensible position, a place that could funnel the famed saberist into attacking from only one angle while still giving him the room to maneuver.

The crack of shattering rubble filled his ears, the crack widening as the Lion approached, bits of debris cascading from the broken pieces like rain. "Kerwin Drake." The Lion spoke, his words reverborating in the Devaronian's ears and his head. There was no mistaking the green skin and black bearded alien from the dossier that the Consul had provided. Muz kept his pace, his head swinging to look at the narrowing gulch, the unstable earth and ruins before a half smile crept up his lips as his advantage crumbled.

Kerwin turned himself sideways, lowering his center of gravity as his electrostaff snapped to life. "You could surrender."

The snap of lightsaber ignition was his only response.

Kerwin reacted with rage, launching himself at the man, his staff snarling forward to catch the Lion in the chest, but finding himself short by a few feet. Ashen's feet carried him aside the strike, a fast metal hand crashing against the Devaronian's horn. The shockwave sent echoes of pain through his skull that he shook off, breaking backwards to give himself a little distance. Ashen kept moving toward him, the same steady gait, even as his saber rose to meet the illuminated end of his electrostaff. He alternated his strikes, some the man simply dodging, the others intercepted by violet blade. Kerwin was good, better with a staff than anyone he had ever met, and he could not find an opening in the Grand Master's defenses. He felt a bead of sweat on his brow as he moved, buying time and life with each strike, every step backward. He had seen the holos, he had heard the rumors, and he did not understand why the Keibatsu hadn't attacked yet. The thought raised his pulse. He had seen the holos, after all.

"You could surrender." Ashen repeated the words Kerwin had said, half a smile still playing across his face. He tarried a moment, his mind racing to the twins, Den tugging on Ira's horns as they chased each other through their home. Happier times, before the Lotus, before the Collective. He sneered at the Lord, pointed teeth bared as he contemplated options, his staff bouncing forward as if by rote. Who would take care of them? Who would feed them, make sure their clothes were clean, that they got to bed on time?

Kerwin bounded backwards, out of range, his hands slipping toward the power switch on the staff. Perhaps they would take him back, station him somewhere safe, out of the reach of the brotherhood's political backstabbings and open warfare. Perhaps he would be able to watch the twins grow rather than the angry blades of the Lion as he walked toward him. He shut down the staff, lowering himself to one knee, resting the staff on the rusty earth, averting his eyes in the old signs of respect. After all, if he fell here, who would take care of the twins?

The blade screamed through his neck, and he could taste the burnt blood on the back of his tongue as his head rolled forward.

Rath Oligard would.

Placement
5th place
Member
Adept Reiden Palpatine Karr
File submission
GJW_XII_Combat_Writing_(10106).pdf
Placement
6th place
Member
General Stres'tron'garmis
File submission
GJW_XII_Combat_Writing_(1).pdf
Placement
7th place
Member
Saitou Tarentae
Submission
Saitou Tarentae opted out of publishing his submission.
Placement
8th place
10th place
Rian Taldrya
Member
Rian Taldrya
File submission
_GJW_XII_Event_Long__Combat_Writing_-_Collective_Strike.pdf
Textual submission

Again a submission focussing around the idea that more than only Rath Oligard are former members of the DB and thus eventually create situations where former friends are forced to face each other on different sides now, Anyways have fun reading and judging this ;)

Placement
10th place
Member
Privateer Tyraal Bitshiver
File submission
DJB_download_sheet_(1).pdf
Placement
No placement
Member
Ghost Rulvak Qurroc
File submission
Collective_Strike.pdf
Placement
No placement
Member
Master Bentre Stahoes
File submission
Collective_Strike_14185.pdf
Placement
No placement
Member
Master Zsarion Bloodfyre
File submission
Collective_Strike_Beef_756.pdf
Placement
No placement
Member
Magik
Submission
Magik opted out of publishing his submission.
Placement
No placement
Member
Torin Ardell
File submission
Combat_Writing_-_Darro_Zhen.pdf
Placement
No placement
Member
Ashia Kagan Keibatsu
File submission
Collective_Strike.pdf
Placement
No placement
Member
Warlord Hades
File submission
Hades_8596_Collective_Strike.pdf
Placement
No placement
Member
Zyron Kael
File submission
Combat_Writing_-__Kerwin_Drake.pdf
Placement
No placement
Member
Nadrin Erinos Arconae
Submission
Nadrin Erinos Arconae opted out of publishing his submission.
Placement
No placement
Member
Essik Lyccane
Submission
Essik Lyccane opted out of publishing his submission.
Placement
No placement
Member
Grot
File submission
Rat_Trap_(1).pdf
Placement
No placement
Member
Kaz Raith
Submission
Kaz Raith opted out of publishing his submission.
Placement
No placement
Member
Edgar Drachen
Submission
Edgar Drachen opted out of publishing his submission.
Placement
No placement
Member
Zeline Nemesis
Submission
Zeline Nemesis opted out of publishing her submission.
Placement
No placement
Member
Raiheaux
File submission
GJW_-_Collective_Strike.pdf
Placement
No placement
Member
Duke Kojiro Keibatsu Sadow
File submission
Collective_Strike_-_8106_-_Kojiro_Keibatsu.pdf
Placement
No placement
Member
Tribune Kanal O'neill
File submission
Match_verse_Captain_Crimson.pdf
Placement
No placement
Member
Aurora "Aura" Ta'var
File submission
GJW_TheForceUnleashed.pdf
Placement
No placement
Member
Ethan Martes
File submission
Ethan_Martes_Collective_Strike.pdf
Textual submission

Sometimes to win, all you need is someone to let down their guard.

Placement
No placement
Member
Rathus Marr
Submission
Rathus Marr opted out of publishing his submission.
Placement
No placement
Member
Maximus Alvinius
File submission
MaximusAlvinius-CombatWriting.doc
Placement
No placement
Member
Adept Xantros
File submission
Augur_Xantros__11518__Collective_Strike.pdf
Placement
No placement
Member
Braecen Kaeth
File submission
GJW12.CollectiveStrike.Braecen4520.docx
Placement
No placement
Member
Mauro Wynter
File submission
Slaying_the_Drake.docx
Placement
No placement
Member
Dr. Giyana Jurro
Submission
Dr. Giyana Jurro opted out of publishing her submission.
Placement
No placement
Member
Sia Thiano
File submission
Sia_long_fiction.docx
Placement
No placement
Member
General Daniel Stephens
File submission
Collective_Strike.pdf
Placement
No placement