Competition: AVD: Write that schutta a sonnet, schutta's love sonnets

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AVD: Write that schutta a sonnet, schutta's love sonnets

Time to show some love, some flow. Give us a love sonnet, at least one stanza long, expressing affection and admiration.

Grading is based on originality, flow, and entertainment value.

Note: If it ain't Star Wars related, it ain't gonna place.

Competition Information
Parent Competition
Arcona Presents: VD
Organized by
General Stres'tron'garmis
Running time
2018-02-01 until 2018-02-28 (28 days)
Target Unit
Entire DJB
Competition Type
Poetry
Awards
Second Level Crescents
Participants
16 subscribers, of which 10 have participated.
Results
Member
Master Ruka Tenbriss Ya-ir
Textual submission

Dear true love,

I maybe didn't know,
before I met you,
how much I could glow.
How I could just BURST with this light
like I was shinin' all bright.
And I don't mean
in spirit or some special space sense
I mean somethin' simpler, somethin' intense.
It's just this feeling
deep inside
bubbling up where I got no place to hide.
It's warm and it's sweet and oh Shadows it hurts
to know something so good and ever have it stop,
to have something so good that ain't nothing can top.
You
YOU taught me good
and bright
and light.
You
taught me that laughing's got bubbles
and napping's got snuggles
and every smile's a treasure worth more than any gold
and they don't even need teeth to be bold.
You
taught me that arms can be bread rolls
and you can have raisins for eyes
and the most beautiful thing in the world
is seeing you cry
because it means you're here with me and alive.
You
taught me how it's possible to love more
than you were made to.
That I could love you more
than I ever knew how.
And you, baby girl,
taught me that I could be a hero in somebody's eyes
no matter what I deserved.
I'd try to rhyme for you
and then watch it all fall apart
but you'd still just love me
with your crazy big heart.
Baby girl,
my bunny, butterfly, beauty,
I'm gonna try so, so hard to teach you
even half of what you taught me
and I'm gonna have trouble, I guarantee.
Me and your daddy,
we love you so much,
you're the best thing our lives have ever touched,
and you'll always be the best thing we'll ever know such.
But me and your daddy,
we're still learning too,
and we're gonna mess up,
we're gonna fail you.
Just know everyday that you are so precious
so loved
and so worth more than we can ever give or become.
Baby girl,
the universe was made
just to be seen by your eyes.
So keep them open, my love,
and whatever comes know
that you carry us wherever you go
and that you're gonna grow up
and find your own courage and hope,
take your own hurt and climb your own slope,
you'll fly and you'll fly and you'll fly 'til the star winds have blown,
and still you won't ever be alone.
Once I wouldn't have thought such a thing could be true,
but then, dear, you were born, and I met you.
So I'm telling you now, these words you gotta remember:
to you, my heart I surrender.

Placement
1st place
Member
Master Bentre Stahoes
Submission
Master Bentre Stahoes opted out of publishing his submission.
Placement
2nd place
Member
Moff Alethia Archenksova
Textual submission

A somewhat notorious Ryn,
After a bit too much o' tha gin,
Decided to try on
Turel's stolen thong
...Now let's never speak of it again.

Placement
3rd place
Member
Qyreia Arronen
Submission
Qyreia Arronen opted out of publishing her submission.
Placement
No placement
Member
Corsair Chrome
Submission
Corsair Chrome opted out of publishing his submission.
Placement
No placement
Member
Magik
Submission
Magik opted out of publishing his submission.
Placement
No placement
Member
Aedile Tali Sroka
File submission
AVD-_Schutta_sonnet.pdf
Textual submission

It's bad and it's tacky, but at least it's in a bloody sonnet form! :P

Placement
No placement
Member
Adept Tahiri Thorn Morte Tarentae
Textual submission

From the plains of Shili to the forests of Dagobah,
There is no other hunter on any world,
That is matched in skill or talent raw,
With the same beastmaster's flag unfurled.

As the top predators in the night,
Together a force to be reckoned with,
Showing our enemies our might,
Our greatness and love will create a monolith.

Placement
No placement
Member
Mauro Wynter
Textual submission

Lounging in the Sky Breach Base cantina
Overly drinking thinking of his lost love Christina
Vexed deeply over her betrayal
Endless heartache drowned by the ale

In the midst of such sadness
Stormtroopers strode in with a sense of madness

Searching for the words to say
Umbaran women always seem to get away
Chosen from afar and such longing
Her she was, and now left without any belonging

Pain is such a transformative feeling
Again he rose to address the squad
In the end the whole ordeal was intensely odd
Nowhere to run he turned himself in

Placement
No placement
Member
Dr. Rhylance
Textual submission

My heart for Science.
By Rhylance.

Truth abounding, unrelenting, sincere.
Of the many laws spoken in our lives
None more powerful that we all should fear
Than natural discourse where logic thrives.

A lifetime of studies to comprehend
All which surrounds us, the galaxies vast
Still I find myself unable to bend
The Force you keep from me, stuck in my past.

Closer and closer, I feel myself there
Your secret, hidden from ME, I must learn
To you I give myself. My life. My heir.
Connection I seek, give me my due turn.

Willing Forever to chase your great prize
Science in stars, in suns, shine in mine eyes.

Placement
No placement