Competition: [Naga Sadow]Hyperlanes, Take Me Home

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[Naga Sadow]Hyperlanes, Take Me Home

Prompt

Songs have been written on many aspects of life, death, war and peace. The masses need some sort of song to both inspire and rally behind in this hour as they descend upon Sepros.

Using this song (lyrics can be found here for reference) as a basis, create a song/poem that reflects your character's potential desire to return to the Orian system. The song can be serious or humorous in content. It could even reflect a lack of desire, if you so desire.

Just ensure your version of the song has a (very) rough approximation to the song "Country Roads" in some part recognizable by the graders and include at least 120 words to be be viable for participation credit.

Grading

Poems/songs will be graded on a basis of:

adherence to rhyme scheme (25%)
adherence to theme (35%)
creativity in word choice (35%)
grader's enjoyment of the resulting song/poem (5%)

Competition Information

Parent Competition: Clan Naga Sadow presents: Redemption and Honor
Organized by: Master Bentre Stahoes, Tasha'Vel Versea, Ashia Kagan Keibatsu
Running time: 2019-12-09 until 2020-01-13 (about 1 month)
Target Unit: Clan Naga Sadow
Competition Type: Poetry
Awards: Third Level Crescents
Participants: 6 subscribers, of which 5 have participated.

Results

1st place

Master Zsarion Bloodfyre

Member

Master Zsarion Bloodfyre

Textual submission

In Yridia, under water
With the sea life
Under water creatures.

Life was over
We got beaten
Sent out packin'
To anywhere would take us.

Clan Sadow, gave me a home.
The new place, I belong.
Got to Sepros, left Yridia.
My new home...
In Sadow.

All Tarenti
They gathered 'round me
As I told them
We were no more.

Darkness 'round me
All my family
I miss them every day
Tear drops in my eyes.

Clan Sadow, gave me a home.
The new place, I belong.
Got to Sepros, left Yridia.
My new home...
In Sadow.

I found a new place
In the system Orian it calls me
The place makes me feel
Like my home, so far away

Flying in my boat
I get the feeling
That I shoulda
Come here before…
Here before...

Clan Sadow, gave me a home.
The new place, I belong.
Got to Sepros, left Yridia.
My new home...
In Sadow.

Be my home...
Clan Sadow.

Be my home…
Clan Sadow.

Placement

1st place

2nd place

Lord Muz Ashen Keibatsu

Member

Lord Muz Ashen Keibatsu

Textual submission

past the darkness, beneath the shroud
lays our homeland, where we are proud
we've built up in Orian's dream
in the jungles, more than they seem

Naga Sadow, guide us home
to the worlds we call our own
Sepros Temple, Ancient Empire
guide us home, Naga Sadow

we remember when we were young
full of fire, songs to be sung
found our masters deep in the dust
old clan forged us, out of old rust

Naga Sadow, bring us home
to the lands we once roamed
Orian Chantry, Ancient Empire
bring us home, Naga Sadow

He calls us all, red skin and crown
through the ages, never let us down
bid us welcome, he lets us know
that it's time now to come home

Naga Sadow, We're coming home
To the worlds we call our own
bringing fire, Ancient Empire
We're coming home, Naga Sadow

Placement

2nd place

3rd place

Ashura Isradia Sadow

Member: Ashura Isradia Sadow
Submission: Ashura Isradia Sadow opted out of publishing his submission.
Placement: 3rd place

4th place

Seer Xolarin

Member

Seer Xolarin

Textual submission

Almost there now, Orian system, Planet Tarthos, The church of old Sadow
Things are old there, older than our foes, my dreams are younger, my hunger grows

Hydian Waaaay, take me home to space we own now
Kar Alabrek, The Cathedral, take me home, Sadow's waaaay

The Collective, bastards waiting, no idea, we're coming for home
There lives are over, control will wavering, take a look now, our power craving

Hydian Waaaay, take me home to space we own now
Kar Alabrek, The Cathedral, take me home, Sadow's waaaay

Placement

4th place

5th place

Adept DarkHawk Sadow

Member: Adept DarkHawk Sadow
File submission: hyperlanes take me home.pdf
Placement: 5th place