Braecen felt a boot slam into his ribs – an instant before he saw it coming through the Force – and the breath left is lungs. He countered with a head-high backslash and brought his own foot up, landing a Force-enhanced snap-kick between the legs of the crimson armored blur attacking him. The blow drew a pained grunt but failed to even stagger his foe.
A thick elbow slammed up under his chin, rocking him onto his heels. Then, finally, Braecen felt a familiar tingle in the back of his mind, and she saw the image of a blood-red blade slashing at his vulnerable side. He swept his own lightsaber down across the front of his body in a desperate reverse block that barely caught the attack in time to prevent it from slicing him in two, then whirled into a spinning back kick that landed squarely in the foe’s stomach and drove him back just a mere two steps.
It was enough.
Ernordeth gazed upon an enraged Elder. Gaunt-faced with eyes as blue and cold as steel, nostrils flaring red with anger and exertion, a thin-lipped snarl filled with confidence and disdain. Even as Braecen leapt forward weaving a basket of lightsaber slashes, Ernordeth sprang back out of the way, launching himself into a high Force flip designed to put as much distance between himself and the attacker as possible.
The Marauder set his feet, then flew after Braecen, not even bothering to try for the high position, simply coming up under him with a wild slash combination that was anything but subtle or deft or even tricky; just pure relentless ferocity. Braecen had to stretch himself out belly-down in midair to meet the attack, and even calling on the Force to bolster the strength in his arms, it was all he could do to keep the powerful strikes from knocking his guard aside and leaving him wide open.
They traded a trio of lightning fast blows that left Braecen’s hands stinging and his heart racing. The last time he had fought someone of equivalent tenacity and skill he barely managed to survive. Now, in lesser shape from repeated telekinetic attacks, he had to prevail. There would be no mercy at the last minute from the Battlelord. After a third exchange, Braecen and Ernordeth came to rest in a small clearing of level ash ringed by volcanic rock. The air hung above them laced with smoke and sulfuric acid; a byproduct of the molten rivers of lava that wound around them.
Ernordeth caught the injured Elder unaware once again, pushing his palm forward. An instant later, the unseen hammer of a Force blast caught Braecen in the sternum and threatened to drive him not over, but through the boulders at his back. With but a whisper of warning, he had discarded both of his blades. As they slowly rotated in freefall to the ground, he raised his hands, splayed his fingers and willed a fortification between himself his red-skinned opponents strike.
Ernordeth still had his lightsaber – and he needed it. He brought the weapon up just as blue-white lightning came slicing down toward him. Ernordeth caught it on his crimson blade, then straightened his arm, and prepared to launch himself for a coup de grace.
There was no time to leap or loose another bolt of Force lightning, and the arena was particularly poor for evasion. Braecen’s only hope rested not in what he could do, but what he could limit his opponent from doing. His arms still outstretched he rocked them back in unison, as he rolled his shoulders, and pushed his ill-intent through the Force towards his foe. A tsunami of malice crashed over the Equite and wrapped him in a wet blanket that choked his connection to the Dark Side. Without the telekinetic boost, Ernordeth’s assault fell short of its intent. And directly into the path of the Sith Adept.
As the Battlelord attempted to regain his momentum, his opportunistic opponent swept his legs and accelerated his descent to the ashy floor. Braecen reached for his weapons and moved to put more distance between himself and the Praetor.
“When did she issue the order to kill me?” Braecen hissed. “And why would she send only one of her Champions to defeat me?”
“You only need one of me,” Ernordeth retorted, “to overcome a withered, old Sith who is far past his prime. Step aside, Kaeth, and let Pravus’ New Order rise.”
The calculating eyes of the Adept chewed over his foe’s words. Truly, if Ernordeth was an advocate of the Grand Master, he had made assumptions in error. He had considered the most likely scenario for discovery, but he had not taken the time to consider all of the individuals that might be interested in his subterfuge within Dajorra.
“If you are truly for Pravus, prove it,” Braecen carefully demanded.
“You first,” the unrelenting Praetor retorted.
“A truce then,” the Elder offered, “until we can get back to my ship. I have an encrypted message from the Grand Master that will prove the weight of my words. What can you offer?”
The Battlelord deactivated his blade, then tossed the weapon to the Quaestor, before he simply said, “My life.”
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Great job framing the fight in the larger context of Clan events. You really connected the reader to your character by showing his motivations beyond simply "ragey Sith." As a reader, I felt strong empathy for Ernordeth, which is what you want.
I was wondering the exact same thing by the end of this post. While you did excellent with your character's motivations you did little to shed some light as to why Braecen was there and why they were in conflict. He just kind of appears and attacks Ernor. First poster gets to establish the conflict, including the how and why, and you missed that opportunity here.
Also it's worth pointing out separately that your post needed a little more action in it beyond a single saber clash.