“I haven’t heard anything yet, Lar, but I’ll send word if anything comes in,”
Larrik Dul’vak nodded amicably at the speaker, a shabbily dressed Duros who ran the cluttered and messily organized electronics shop that the two were standing in the middle of, located deep in the midst of Coruscant Level 1313.
“Alright, I’ll be in touch. Anything good comes up, you’ll get your usual fee, Elais,” Larrik let a slight smirk touch his lips. “Maybe a bonus if the tip’s really good.”
“As much I would like the bonus, Lar, we both know anything really good is unlikely to come this way this far from Selen,” The Duros snorted and waved a hand at the Human. “Now get out of here before you start scaring away my customers, eh?”
“”Oh please, I’m probably the most pleasant guy that you’ll see all day,” Larrik chuckled before heading toward the exit. “Alright, catch you later.”
Larrik fished out a cigar as he stepped outside into the dark undercity of Coruscant, the only lights visible coming from the streetlights that lined the level, the occasional flickering coming from an almost burnt-out bulb. Despite the dismal surroundings, the streets were fairly well crowded, filled with all kinds of unsavory types off on one illicit business or another. Maybe even some legal business, although Larrik doubted it.
Taking in a deep breath, Larrik could smell the foulness of the air, intermingling aromas of various kinds of cigarra smoke, greasy fried food, exhaust from the freighters that lumbered through the level on their way to somewhere else, and even the stench of urine, all unfiltered by air purifiers. That was a luxury only afforded to the upper classes of Coruscant, not for the scum that inhabited the lower levels..
In other words, a place where he was perfectly at home.
Clamping the cigar within his lips, he soon had it lit with a quick efficient puff. Putting away his lighter, he blew out a plume of blue-grey smoke as he casually strolled into the throng, blending in seamlessly with the riffraff bustling to and fro on their own urgent business.
Goddamn Zakath, sending me all the way out here on some fishing trip. The hell did he expect me to find out here a trillion karking miles from Selen?
Larrik grunted as he continued to smoke his stogie, slowly pushing through the milling crowd as he continued on to his next stop to question yet another of his contacts about the recent movements of one Teroch Erinos. Zakath hadn’t bothered to tell him much, only that some recent intelligence acquired by the DIA had traced Teroch’s recent movements to Coruscant, and therefore the Barabel had decided to send Larrik to question some of his unsavory contacts in the lower levels. Not that Larrik expected to find anything significant.
Whatever. Long as I get pa-
Larrik’s thoughts was interrupted as a short humanoid figure bumped roughly into his side, a fuzzy tail accidently slapping into his chest before the Mercenary shoved the figured back with a grunt. He was about to continue on his trek when he suddenly felt something wrong. His eyes narrowed as one hand slowly dropped to his trusty 48.caliber Enforcer pistol while his other hand touched his back pocket.
His empty back pocket.
Medium type humanoid. Fuzzy tail. Though maybe not for much longer.
He continued his trek casually for a minute longer before slowly turning around and going the direction he had just came, his eyes now peeled for the pickpocket. Ordinarily, nabbing a pickpocket in this kind of crowd would be next to impossible, but Larrik had been on Level 1313 long enough to notice that most of the alien crowd here didn’t possess a tail, which would stick out like a sore thumb if he thought he had gotten away with it.
Larrik slowly continued his stroll, his dark eyes now sharply scanning the crowd, disguised as casual glances to either side of himself, as if he was trying to find a particular storefront. It was only a couple of moments before he saw what he was looking for. An humanoid figure with a shock of wild untamed white hair bristling out in all directions, dressed in shabby cargo pants and a black leather jacket, almost similar to his own. And, of course, a long muscular fuzzy tail.
Larrik smiled faintly.
He kept a fair distance from the figure as he tailed it, keeping a careful eye on its path until finally it ducked into an alley and off the beaten path. Larrik’s pace quickened slightly until he got to the entrance of the alley, at which point he paused to stub out his cigar and toss it away, withdrawing his pistol.
“...’vak, yeh, that’s the lizard’s bounty hunter. So Blinky was right about that. Wonder why he’s out here?”
Shifting off the safety, Larrik suddenly spun into the alleyway, his pistol instantly on the sole figure within.
“An excellent question, my little friend. I could ask the same of you,” Larrik grunted as he studied the figure, which had whirled around startled. A fluted nose on the figure suddenly gave away its species. “Ah, a Ryn, that explains the tail. how curious. Shouldn’t you birdrats be up near the upper levels for your petty thefts? Hardly anything to steal down here.”
“Eh, you’ll be surprised,” The Ryn said, a weak smile touching his thin lips. “How bout we don’t do anything rash, yeh? No need for a fight here.”
“Mm, ordinary, you’ll be right,” Larrik nodded slightly before a scowl touched his lips. “But you said something about the lizard’s bounty hunter. Which means you know me. Spill the karking beans, Ryn. Now.”
“Sure, pal, sure. Uh, how about your wallet back first? Make things equal again yeh?”
The Ryn suddenly flung the small object in his hand toward Larrik, and the Mercenary caught it easily with his free hand. It was indeed his wallet, but before he could demand answers from the pickpocket, a sudden burst of bright suddenly erupted, searing into his eyeballs. Larrik let out a snarling curse as he squeezed his eyes shut and let loose with his pistol. Inbetween cracks as his gun fired, Larrik could hear a screech of pain further in the distance.
Good. I hope he bleeds out painfully.
It took a long moment, far longer than Larrik would’ve liked, but finally the intense glare faded as he rapidly blinked his eyes. As the alleyway came into focus, the Ryn was gone. A quick check of the ground revealed no sign of any grenade casings.
Force User then. Dammit.
A check further up the alleyway revealed a small splatter of blood that slowly trailed away into the distance. Larrik let out a internal snarl as he mentally counted his bullets, his feet now following the bloodtrail.
Three bullets fired. Five remaining before reload. That karking birdrat is going to scream loud and hard. Not even his damned Force is going to save him.
Syntax
Since these aren't cases of "he said, she said" you should close off the dialogue with a full stop instead of a comma.
Your quotes are performing cell division in defiance against you. You should punish them.
If "thoughts" is plural, it should be "were" instead of "was". Otherwise, it should be "thought".
Should be ".48-caliber". I checked around to make sure it wasn't proper syntax to use it as you did before flagging it.
Should be "A humanoid figure".
"how" managed to sneak in without a capital after the period.
Don't need a capital on "The".
"bright" what? As an adjective it should be augmenting a noun, though you may have meant to use light on its own here.
Should be "an internal".
Story
Assume your reader has no idea what the DIA is. You can use initialism after its first use, but in this case I had to do some searching to figure it out, and some assuming.
Good use of the weapon's magazine count and drawing the reader's attention to it.