Great, first the cold, now some bleedin’ lummox is tryin’ ta kill me. And he karked off tha Wampa.
“Get...tha...frak...off..of...me,” he grunted, pushing at the heavier trooper without making much headway.
Whoever had bowled him over shook his head once, twice, then seemed to snap out of whatever daze had taken him. With the blue glow that permeated and illuminated the cave, it was hard to tell much of the man’s features, but his eyes widened in alarm right before rolling off of the Ryn. Kordath grunted as an elbow dug into somewhere soft, squishy, and dear to him, not that the soldier noticed as he’d managed to snap himself up to a kneeling position with his rifle tucked against his shoulder. The Ryn squeezed his eyes shut as crimson bolts spat out in rapid succession and the Wampa roared in pain, opening them only when he heard a great weight land in the snow and ice.
Slowly, the Rollmaster got to his own feet, watching the...Human? Looked Human enough, though in the lichen luminosity it was hard to tell if he wasn’t one of the other near breeds. They all looked the same, hairless and cold. He groaned and straightened his back, stretching his upper body and giving his tail a twitch to insure nothing had been damaged. His head hurt, though when he touched the back of it he found no blood, still he was feeling a touch light headed. He knew this mission would be a pain the moment it had been handed to him, a scavenger hunt on Hoth could only end poorly.
“What tha ‘ell is wrong with ya? Can’t watch where yer goin’, can’t walk quiet enough ta not tick off tha Wampas! What are ya even doin’ here?” Kordath hissed at the man, trying to keep his voice low. Probably a futile effort now after all the blaster fire. The Human turned, his rilfe held at an angle across his chest with the muzzle towards the ground. Bleu felt his heart sink when he took in the insignias on the man’s uniform. The patch for the Nighthawk was clear on his shoulder.
Well it was bound ta happen eventually, wonder if this whole mission was just a bloody trap?
“You’re Bleu, aren’t you? You used to be Captain on the--where are you going?” shouted the soldier.
The Ryn wasn’t waiting to find out if his paranoia was justified or not, turning tail and running deeper into the caves. He could hear the soldier calling out in confusion for him. The light sweeping the cavernous darkness from his rifle helped give away his position as well,. Kordath had been expecting somebody from Galeres to come after him since the day he had taken off for Port Ol’val and had offered his services up to Qel-Droma. He’d seen the way the Galerians, and the military, had looked at him after the whole debacle with the Pereditition forces when he’d been forced to work against the Clan. Being under mind control wasn't considered a free pass for treason, apparently. The jackboots of the militaristic House wouldn’t let this slide, he’d hoped putting himself out of view would avoid this sort of thing though.
Now he had a trained killer, an ex-Stormtrooper by the look of him, tracking him through a bloody ice cave on bloody Hoth and here he was without a bloody idea if the mission he was on was legit. With his back against an ice stalagmite, Kordath pushed out with the Force to track the man looking for him. Whoever this guy was he was alert, he wasn’t missing a lot of details either and seemed to be tracking the Ryn with some ability.
Blasted snow and ice, probably see me footprints. I do nae want ta fight tha sleemo if I don’t have ta. Then again, he glanced around his icy cover and caught sight of the light on the soldier’s weapon. We’re pretty far out and away, do it quiet, nobody knows, eh? Just get ta see tha look of surprise on Kaeth’s smug bloody face when I get home alive.
“Not gonna take me out so easy, soldier boy,” he growled under his breath as the trooper stepped up alongside the spire of ice. Kordath shot a palm up before the man’s face and released a burst of Force energy as a bright flash. He followed this by stepping just past the man and kicking back into the knee joint to send the much taller Human to the ground. Bleu was almost impressed when he went to bring a boot down on the Major’s neck, but found the soldier had already rolled himself over and put his arms up to catch the blow. He was even more surprised when the Major pushed up and out the second he felt the Ryn’s foot touch him, sending him back and knocking the Rollmaster off balance. Years of experience, the Rollmaster figured.
“Bollocks,” muttered the Seer as he shifted his footing to recover, watching the Human get back up with spryness that belied his apparent age. Kordath readied himself for the man’s counterattack, but watched in surprise as the soldier swung his rifle back up into position. He spotted the strap holding it to him, and groaned, having expected the blaster to have been lost when the trooper hit the ice.
Least he can’t see, yet, probably. I hope.
This didn’t seem to stop the Major, who, having perceived a threat, opened fire blindly. Blaster bolts lit the cavern up even more than the blue lichen as the weapon fired in a sweeping arc, a testament to the man’s training that it remained more or less level. Kordath scrambled across the icy ground, sliding and scurrying while mentally cursing himself for not just running when he had knocked the man down. Now he’d gone and made a trained soldier angry.
I do not want ta die here, it’s too cold! he thought to himself, ignoring the lack of logic as he panicked. As he tried to find cover, he heard a noise behind that sounded suspiciously like ‘There you are you little rodent’ before the Force blared a warning in his head to dodge. The ground didn’t agree with his attempt and a lancing pain in his right arm told him he’d been shot.
At least it was warm. Hurt a bit though. Finally skittering himself to cover he reached up and poked the tender, burnt flesh of his bicep, telling himself that at least it was just a graze. Booted footsteps informed him the trooper was pursuing, he gritted his teeth as he pulled the sapphire blade from its sheath. This was going to get messy before it was over. The steps stopped and the Ryn heard the Major shifting in the ice and snow.
Excellent description in this paragraph.
You use lowercase "clan" in this post and uppercase in the second post. Either is acceptable in this context (not a proper noun like Clan Arcona) but you should be consistent.
Story - You had some great action in this post, but you had zero conflict with your opponent. You don't even mention him until the last full paragraph of the post and even then it's bumping into him while fleeing a wampa. As the first poster you should set up the conflict between the characters. In the future don't forget to depict your opponent and keep the focus on the conflict and combat between the characters.